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since 1999-07-17
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Oak Grove

0 posted 2000-05-23 11:46 PM

Im lost in this world of hate,
My light has gone out along with my fate,

I am living my whole life a lie,
Wishing each day is the day i die,

I cannot go on with this life i am in,
Every day I only add to my sin,

I feel alone even when i am not,
I feel I am the only one i got,

Why is it that every one goes away,
Everyone leaves me in this world to stray,

I am soo close to finishing my life on my own,
Everything I have ever had I have blown!

 "A Love Found Brings A Smile, But The Lost Lost Only Brings Pain"

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since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....
1 posted 2000-05-24 04:18 PM

Jimmy, no one can magically make your life all better....only you can work towards it, others can help but ultimately it is up to you to do something about it.

Love and hugs,

 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada
2 posted 2000-05-24 09:29 PM

I assumed the title of the thread was help ending the poem. I hope I assumed right.

I look all around for one to see me
But in their faces there's nothing I see

I have to look deeper into myself
To find what I need, to find my own wealth.

I search and I search and what do I find?
That I am unique, truely one of a kind.

I find so much spendor and glory within
I find so much talent I don't know where to begin

Now others can see it as plain as I can
For while searching for gold, I found a man. (woman)

I hope this helps with the piece and the situation you are going through. If you need someone to talk to, please, feel free to e-mail me.  

 When you are old and grey and full of sleep,
And nodding by the fire, take down this book,
And slowly read, and dream of the soft look
Your eyes had once, and of their shodows deep;

How many loved your moments of glad grace,
And loved your beauty with love false or true,
But one man loved the pilgrim soul in you,
And loved the sorrows of your changing face...

William Butler Yeats

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since 2000-05-17
Posts 15
3 posted 2000-05-24 10:33 PM

You sound very down, life is what you make it and its not as bad as you think it is.
you say "Think everything i have blown "So you must change this for the better. look at what things have happen and say i can change all this. I wish you the best of luck and there is plenty of happiness coming your way.
love Rhiannon

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