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The war's not lost.
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The war's not lost. |
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TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa 
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I am standing out here looking inside, not trying to hide everything I see in there. I have tried very hard to understand why these feelings woun't die and I can't move forward. If only I could break free from this trance, use my next chance and not look back, I would. Will I change, will I make that move? I've got so much to prove. I've left behind my rage. But I'm so tired now, I don't want to fight, my light has turned to night. It's time to give in now. I can't fight no more, I've lost, it's true, the battle goes to you, but it's far from over, this war. |
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Dina Junior Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 10 |
I really enjoyes this poem. I really can relate to it. Keep up the good work! |
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TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa |
Thanks Dina, I appreciate your opinion  |
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Daysleeper Member
since 2000-04-23
Posts 119 |
This is great. You can almost feel the exhaustion and frustration... but what's it about... Literally, I mean? Personally struggle? Frustration in general? ...Daysleeper... "We prefer to do things comfortably" said the Controller. "But I don't want comfort. I want God, I want poetry, I want real danger, I want freedom, I want goodness. I want sin." "In fact," said Mustapha Mond, "you're claiming the right to be unhappy." "Alright then," said the Savage defiantly, "I'm claiming the right to be unhappy." -Aldous Huxley "Brave New World" |
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TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa |
I'm usually not very good to putting what I felt while writing a poem to words, but I'm gonna try my best daysleeper... This poem is about personal struggle and the frustrations I hide. I have always been the lesser one, the one living on my knees. I have always believed that I should be strong for everybody else, fight for them when they can't, when they feel like giving up, give them reason to go on, help them in hard times. I have always tried to make others as happy as I can. But now I am tired, tired of smiling when I'm feeling sad, tired of saying everything is ok when I feel like breaking down, tired of talking and no one listening, i'm just emotionally tired ingeneral. When I said "the battle goes to you", I am admitting that the world and it's things got the best of me, that I am not as strong as I would like everyone to think and that I don't always have all the answers even though I wish I had. In the past I always felt so incontrol, as if I could handle everything, but these last few weeks things have just been slipping through my hands, and all I can do is watch helplessly. Some things are meant to happen, and there is nothing you can do about it, I know that, and that is why I haven't lost the war yet. When my life is over one day, and I can look back and say that I have lived my life the best I can and to God's will, I will win the war. I hope that answered your question Daysleeper  |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Great poem, and the reply to Daysleeper really brought it in to perspective for me...great job, I bet you will win the war with a decided victory! Love and hugs, Lizzie "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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