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I CAN'T BELIEVE MY PAIN ( please everyone read this & reply)
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I CAN'T BELIEVE MY PAIN ( please everyone read this & reply) |
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Ben Singleton Junior Member
since 2000-05-02
Posts 18 |
It's been a few days Since we tore apart I'm losing my life Aswell as my heart. It started off great We had lots of fun Like when the rain clouds move over And out comes the sun. But the lights soon turned to dark When YOU split up with me I was left on my own With no-body to see Was it a joke? Because no-body cared Did she really Love me? I bet she was dared. I'm on my own now With no one to talk to Still wondering how I still Love You. A few days after You tell all my friends You want to get back with me You wanna make amends Now everybody hates me For not saying yes Will somebody help me My lifes now a mess! |
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Lonelypoet Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 123Conklin,NY,USA |
Good poem, I hope you find a solution. |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Your probably right for not saying yes. think you saw some true colors, time to move on. Hurt once, shame on her, hurt twice, shame on you! ~~just some thoughts~~ nice writing! |
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Isabelle Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 176Indiana |
Good poem. I'm sorta in the same sitution. Just don't let everyone get to you. You probably said no because you didn't want to get hurt again, I couldn't blame you. Just remember things do work out. I hope that you do find a solution. Isa  "Poetry is the music of the souls, and above all, of great and feeling souls." ~Voltaire~ |
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TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa |
This is a great poem. Forget about what other poeple want you to do. Listen to what your heart has to say, some day, they will also understand. Hope you find a solution. |
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Ben Singleton Junior Member
since 2000-05-02
Posts 18 |
Cheers, all of you. You all seem to have been there before. |
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Dina Junior Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 10 |
I really enjoyed this poem. Ben don't let your life be a mess, just live on for you will find better. If not give me a call k! She is not worth it! |
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the dark angel Junior Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 37 |
somewhere we've all been. Class writing-good on ya for saying no, if she screwed you over then she doesn't deserve you back Love and huggles the dark angel -x- |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
well written.. sad words, mm, sometimes life is like that, but I think u were probably right for saying no, although, it may have been an honest mistake on her part, and she only just realised now, but, if u say yes, the same may happen again.. just wait it out, see what happens, huh? In the meantime, don't break your heart, k? *_^ Fantastic writing.. Lynne |
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Ben Singleton Junior Member
since 2000-05-02
Posts 18 |
Thanks for yor help, evryone has now apologised and me and Joanne are just friends.Cheers to everyone who read the poem and replied, Thanks for your concern |
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luvable New Member
since 2000-04-20
Posts 9 |
This is a really good poem!! I'm sorry that this happened to you but you were right for not saying yes!! I hope everything works out for you!! I know how you feel!! Luv lots, Luvable |
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Phoebee Junior Member
since 2000-07-09
Posts 42Peoria, AZ |
I know I'm a little late, but I'd still like to put in my two cents. This happens to everyone at least once in their life. It's good that you two are friends again. Everything happens for a reason. |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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