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Shattered Dreams |
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aussie_princesss Junior Member
since 2000-05-17
Posts 15Australia |
I met a guy on the internet He was the sweetest guy I ever met He made me laugh, smile and dream Maybe, I thought we could become a team The time flew by, we would sit and chat It was'nt long before we wanted more than that We planned our future to be together You and me forever and ever I gave you my heart to have and to hold I should not have been so bold The miles between us were just too much You needed someone closer to love and touch You shattered my hopes and dreams Along with my heart, or so it seams The plans we made are all just dust Get on with my life I know i must My friends all say, you are no good Agree with them,I know I should You got on with life, found someone new Guess what, I did too It did'nt work out, Our new found loves Once again, I looked to above Your back again and we are friends I hope so to the very end It's to late now to be anymore You broke my heart when you walked out the door Another time another place Or maybe If you could see my face You are there and I am here I will always hold you near I know one day we will meet I dream of it in my sleep I will hold your hand, and kiss your face Maybe my heart will race My friend Chris, friends we will stay As I know its better this way This is dedicated to my first love Chris we lasted 5 months but we will be great friends forever. |
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Vball Chickie1624 Member
since 2000-05-14
Posts 116New York |
Very well written poem, i love it. i know how you feel...i've been there before, it's tough but you can do it! it's always great to stay friends. keep writing!! - Danielle "Dream what you want to dream; go where you want to go; be what you want to be, because you have only one life and one chance to do all the things you want to do." "The role of a writer is not to say what we can all say, but what we are unable to say." - Anais Nin "Follow your own heart, not others." |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
Deranger stands in awe at your ability to actaully rhyme! I can never do it anytime. (err, wait that rhymed!) Yes, dreams shatter easily when compared to say, a brick, but whats that got to do with anything anyway? Don't know? well neither do i!!! Anywho, great poem, though i have reservations about "netluv" i am happy that at least your still friends. ------------------------ Spreading insanity, one post at a time |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
This was an interesting poem and story. The internet makes it so easy to talk to people, words on a screen can say anything. Knowing the REAL person is another matter. Nice that your still friends. |
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Crystalina123 Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 228 |
Danny, No offense but I kind of disagree with what you said about knowing the "real" person -- I am much more real on the internet than I am in person. In person you have to deal with appearances, etc. Though I do understand where you're coming from!! Ok anyway, I think this was a good poem and though I have mever deal with "net luv" I imagine this is hwat it's like. Great first post, welcome to passions!!! -- Crystal "The worst of what people do to one another is deceive. Because when you love someone you control their version of reality. If you lie to them that's like making them autistic so that what they believe is reality is in fact, not their true situation at all." It's not the angry words that break the heart, it's the silence. Someone said that true love is like a ghost -- often spoke of but never seen. I've seen both and yet in my darkest hours, tend to believe that neither exits. |
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aussie_princesss Junior Member
since 2000-05-17
Posts 15Australia |
Danny I believe you really get to know a person on the net more than you do in person.when you do meet, thats if you do then at least you know them.I got to know all of Chris family by talking to them all.When Chris and his family went to his aunts for xmas i got to talk to all them and they learnt from me about Australia.We all spent New Years eve together. Chris and i will meet one day but it will only be as friends as that is the way I want it now. |
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Blondie69 Junior Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 13 |
that was a REALLY good poem. i can relate to how you feel, although i've never had the same kind of love i can still relate, as in the way that i've also had my first love that didn't last, but were together again so thast good, butt eh 2 weeks we were apart adn seeing him go out with another girl, really hurt, but that poems expresses that feeling really well. |
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