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tawny Junior Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 14 |
This poem was written to explain a little of me to some of my friends, hence the simple language, for greater effect and also for my buds with big hearts and small vocabularies. I Am I am crazy; It can't be helped the way I can't even understand myself. Twirling spinning like a tornado and laughing because I have never felt so free. I am shy; hiding things inside until the moment comes when I feel safe enough to trust. I am bold, unafraid and yet uncertain. I am a child; the one who pouts in the corner when things don't go her way. Hiding secrets by flushing them down, while looking in awe at the small world contained within the porcelain bowl. I am insecure; I need something stable, a rock for support as I try to be a rock for others. I am a mother; watching over her children. My friends, so complex, like a puzzle which is 50% sky. I try to understand, or if not, I pretend. I listen. I am sad. I am creative. I am inquisitive. I am smart. I am loving. I am angry. I am happy. I am alive. And for better or worse, more and more every day, I am changing. |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
Hello tawny! Yes, i have a few friends with small vocabs, but big hearts, sometimes , there is a certain beauty in simplicity, big words only complicate anyway. Great poem, dont worry, i'll bump it back to the top! |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
tawny, really liked your poem. You are a lot of things and, yes change is inevitable for us all. ~~well written~~ dh A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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the dark angel Junior Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 37 |
tawny change is inevitable, but is sometimes a good thing. You and I are lots of things, and you captured that beautifuly. Keep up the passion! the dark angel -x- |
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Lucius Cade Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 235Saskatchewan |
Wow yes I love this poem very much. Lucidity is the answer to all problems |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
A wonderful response to the challenge! I enjoyed it a lot! PS- I also have some of those friends with big hearts and small vocabularies... and they are some of the best!  "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde |
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Vball Chickie1624 Member
since 2000-05-14
Posts 116New York |
Excellent poem...very well written...and esy to understand for those friends with small vocabs I think everyone has a few!! - Danielle "Dream what you want to dream; go where you want to go; be what you want to be, because you have only one life and one chance to do all the things you want to do." "The role of a writer is not to say what we can all say, but what we are unable to say." - Anais Nin "Follow your own heart, not others." |
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Daysleeper Member
since 2000-04-23
Posts 119 |
Great poem... Another 'get to know me'... even if that's not what you meant it for, I feel like I know a little more about you now. Excellent poem! ...Daysleeper... "We prefer to do things comfortably" said the Controller. "But I don't want comfort. I want God, I want poetry, I want real danger, I want freedom, I want goodness. I want sin." "In fact," said Mustapha Mond, "you're claiming the right to be unhappy." "Alright then," said the Savage defiantly, "I'm claiming the right to be unhappy." -Aldous Huxley "Brave New World" |
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tawny Junior Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 14 |
thanks all for your input, truly appreciated! -Tawny |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
I loved this poem I can relate to just about everything you said. And as for those friends with small vocabulaires and big hearts, they really are some of the best  . Great Poem.~Susie "If we could read the secret history of our enemies, we should find in each man's life sorrow and suffering enough to disarm all hostility." ~Henry Wadsworth Longfellow "Driftwood" |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
This is great, simplicity is a wonderful thing sometimes....just like friends with big hearts and small vocabs. Yes, this is great. Love and hugs, Lizzie "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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