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Ana Junior Member
since 2000-05-15
Posts 16iLLINOIs |
I hear the mocking echoes Of your sunburned soul They whisper to me in fading blues "He's playing with fire," it says "Stop before you burn too." I lay in a puddle of stars Silver and innocent against the black blanket I reach out to grab one... Holding on for life Take me somewhere safe I stand alone. The tears fall from the sky And I ilet them cleanse me I let them wrap around me To stop the fire... to keep me safe I walk down the broken and cracked road I look back once...and I see him Standing in dirty snow. His eyes are hallow and icy He holds out his hand But there is no feeling behind the rough exterior Simply blackness I smile and reach for my silver piece of heaven. I am free. |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Welcome to Passions! This is a beautiful poem! It's always wonderful to possess that "silver piece of Heaven". Check your e-mail for a special welcome! <!signature--> <font face="Arial, Verdana" size="1" color="#000080"> "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde</font> [This message has been edited by LoveBug (edited 05-15-2000).] |
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Daysleeper Member
since 2000-04-23
Posts 119 |
Oh wow... this is so incredibly gorgeous! People need to read this... It's wonderful. I could go on... but I think I've said what I need to say. The whole poem is just so beautiful! Keep writing! I'll be looking for more of your work. ...Daysleeper... "We prefer to do things comfortably" said the Controller. "But I don't want comfort. I want God, I want poetry, I want real danger, I want freedom, I want goodness. I want sin." "In fact," said Mustapha Mond, "you're claiming the right to be unhappy." "Alright then," said the Savage defiantly, "I'm claiming the right to be unhappy." -Aldous Huxley "Brave New World" |
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Lucius Cade Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 235Saskatchewan |
Wow this is a beautiful poem. Welcome to passions and welcome to teen. Lucidity is the answer to all problems |
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Crystalina123 Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 228 |
I really love this poem Might be easier to read if broken into stanzas but beautiful just the same! Crystal "The worst of what people do to one another is deceive. Because when you love someone you control their version of reality. If you lie to them that's like making them autistic so that what they believe is reality is in fact, not their true situation at all." It's not the angry words that break the heart, it's the silence. Someone said that true love is like a ghost -- often spoke of but never seen. I've seen both and yet in my darkest hours, tend to believe that neither exits. |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Cling on tight to your "piece of heaven". I am glad you found it. Beautiful poem. Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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