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Perfected "I Think I Died Today"
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Perfected "I Think I Died Today" |
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Powder Junior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 20Illinois, USA |
I finally finished th ewhole poem and worked out all the kinks. This is probably the last draft I will do on it because otherwise it might start to lose the emotion. Let me know what you think of it. I Think I Died Today I gave Them what They want today, It seemed I sold my soul. I tried to be like them Today, I turned my heart to coal. There seemed no other way, I think I died today. I tried to hard to change today, I showed that I was weak. I gave up who I was today; I could not be a freak. There seemed no other way, I think I died today. I tried to be "so cool" today, I put my dreams away. There seemed no other way, I think I died today. |
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Lucius Cade Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 235Saskatchewan |
Sometimes fitting in means giving up a "real" part of yourself in sacrafice. It is never worth it. Great poem. Lucidity is the answer to all problems |
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Daysleeper Member
since 2000-04-23
Posts 119 |
Perfected is right! I've been following your work on this poem and I do agree that this is by far the best draft. Great work... ...Daysleeper... |
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Powder Junior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 20Illinois, USA |
Thanks for your support and I hope this poem will help people to realize that even if you do get to run with the "in" crowd then in the end you will lose something that is more important than popularity, yourself. Powder To conquer others is to have power, To conquer yourself is to know the way. |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
Social Order is one of the best jokes ever conceived... In four years, none of that BS will matter, friends are one thing, but these so-called Clicks are for people are too terrified to face the turbulance of life without the escort of a near mob, weather the mob has any good effect on them is merely worthless information. |
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