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karmi New Member
since 2000-05-04
Posts 6Lima, Ohio... usa |
-InSiDe- I feel terrible, I'm so empty... I felt so full. Why must I hide my emotion? I know your love for me was just a notion. All i can do is lock eyes and smile... I knew your purpose the whole while. I sit alone in my room, crying-- My trust is obselete, slowly dying. You built me up, but you dragged me down. ...heavy is the head that wears the crown... You knew how much I felt for you... You didn't have to lie! Why weren't you true? I see you again and you bring back the pain... Wanting you, loving you... it makes me insane. You bring up the things I keep inside-- ...you bring back all that made me hide. -much love- ~karmi* (if you wanna see more poetry, go to: http://mypage.goplay.com/iseeyouinme/ ) |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Desolate piece here.....very well written, the emotions spring off the page into my heart. Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Lots of emotion coming from this poem. Love is a risk, risking your love and wanting that love to be returned. Sometimes it's not but we learn something along the way that teaches us something about life. ~~enjoyed your poem~~ best wishes to you |
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Lucius Cade Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 235Saskatchewan |
You built me up, but you dragged me down. ...heavy is the head that wears the crown... absolutely perfect, I loved it. Lucidity is the answer to all problems |
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Vball Chickie1624 Member
since 2000-05-14
Posts 116New York |
I loved the poem. It's great. Keep writing. - Danielle "Dream what you want to dream; go where you want to go; be what you want to be, because you have only one life and one chance to do all the things you want to do." - Anonymous |
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