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the dark angel
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since 2000-05-10
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0 posted 2000-05-13 12:52 PM

-X- okies, this is just a sort of view towards life from the way that I see it. I try to make everything as happy as I am, but sometimes it just doesn't work cuz I have experienced a lot of death and it kinda rules me. This is the way it was after my sister died (all you who have read "Baby Emily". -x-

Life is like a big obstacle
and every time you think you've gotten past it,
it screws you up
and you're back to square one.

Your friends? Friends swear that they are
but the minute you trust them
they'll turn their backs
and forget you.

Money is the root of all evil
and guess what?
Money wiil bring those same friends back
pretending they'd never left you.

Love screws you up.
When you fall in love, then sommat
will screw you over and guess what?
you're out of love as soon as you fell in it.

Hate is love in disguise
when you hate someone, the forces of love
are working to match
the two of you together.

Fame, fame is a cry for attention
a scream of pain and
for people to love you
without you loving them back.

Pain. Pain's a feeling that will never
ever go away. Don't think you've lost it
cuz you'll be whacked straight back down
to rock bottom.

Life's a neverending spiral of twists and turns
when you think it's all cool
then sommat trips you up

You just have to take each day slowly
realising that every moment
will make the rest
that little bit easier.

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1 posted 2000-05-13 06:15 PM

This is a great poem, and I love the ending. It is so true... but don't forget the beautiful things about life... they are just as real as the unplesant things.

I love this challenge!  

 "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde

since 2000-04-23
Posts 119

2 posted 2000-05-13 06:34 PM

-X- Dark Angel -X-

Great poem. Good rythym and flow and true, slap-in-the-face-true words.

The only definition I might disagree with you on is the definition you've given of hate... But then again that may be your own personal experience. A great read though.


 "We prefer to do things comfortably" said the Controller.
"But I don't want comfort. I want God, I want poetry, I want real danger, I want freedom, I want goodness. I want sin."
"In fact," said Mustapha Mond, "you're claiming the right to be unhappy."
"Alright then," said the Savage defiantly, "I'm claiming the right to be unhappy." -Aldous Huxley "Brave New World"

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3 posted 2000-05-13 06:46 PM

Nothing burns, and with less remorse than the potent truth.  But there are many good things in this world.  I am sorry about your bad experiences with love, but at this stage of life, everyone is a little confused by thier feelings, it gets better.

My little sister may never know why i am going to hug her extra for awhile.

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