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poe_32
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since 2000-04-01
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Winnipeg, MB, Canada

0 posted 2000-05-09 12:47 PM



My heart is so full of pain
my eyes are swelling from the tears
how long will this go on

I travel long distances
hoping to seek happiness
but it runs away from me

I try to smile
see the days as fun
but no mirror can hide the pain

You life shines so bright in the sun
mine is nothing but a picture
painted to seem like it's real

I feel so empty
without a soul to make me shine like you
I'm missing pieces of myself

I seek happiness in a place that is too fare to reach
up above me I do seek

I try to find the golden gates
but they tell me it's not my time
that I'm not needed

I walk through a deserted town
looking for myself
for who I really am

I need to know why I'm here
why was I placed on this earth
to breath this air

It makes me wonder
why I can only feel pain
my thoughts have rings of smoke
smoke of the emptyness that soon will take over

A new day will dawn
the forests will echo with the sounds of happiness
which I haven't found

My spirit is crying
find out who you are
seek the days

Goodbye is all I can think of
goodbye to all
I must go

The spell has been broken
I'am now free
I have found myself

I've gone higher
no more hiding
no more crying
goodbye

© Copyright 2000 Jessica Bjarnason - All Rights Reserved
rlm1519
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since 2000-05-09
Posts 3

1 posted 2000-05-09 12:51 PM


this is a very well written poem. it seems to stem from a lot of thought process.  
amazon_lover
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since 2000-04-09
Posts 491
Dublin,Ireland
2 posted 2000-05-09 03:52 PM


Hi!
Happiness is within you and contentment is the lead to happiness.
Material wealth and places can't lead to happiness. I'm sorry to say these but thats what I feel now and everyone have some scale of happiness.
You're good and happiness will find you. Never hide and cry as they'll close the doors of happiness

Sincerely
A_L

poe_32
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since 2000-04-01
Posts 179
Winnipeg, MB, Canada
3 posted 2000-05-10 12:00 PM


Thanks guys for your replys, but don't worry this isn't a poem I've written about myself, it's just something I thought up. Thanks for your replys!!! smiles   poe        



[This message has been edited by poe_32 (edited 05-10-2000).]

poe_32
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Winnipeg, MB, Canada
4 posted 2000-05-11 11:28 PM


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Lucius Cade
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since 2000-03-23
Posts 235
Saskatchewan
5 posted 2000-05-12 01:51 AM


You life shines so bright in the sun
mine is nothing but a picture
painted to seem like it's real

perfect discription of your feelings, awesome poem

 Lucidity is the answer to all problems

poe_32
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since 2000-04-01
Posts 179
Winnipeg, MB, Canada
6 posted 2000-05-13 03:29 AM


Thanks for your reply LC, I'm glad you enjoyed my poem. I hope to hear from you all again sometime soon. thanks for your replys!!!!smiles poe   
the dark angel
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since 2000-05-10
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7 posted 2000-05-13 04:24 AM


that was a cool poem, I know the feeling. Good writing, hope to see more!
the dark angel
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poe_32
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since 2000-04-01
Posts 179
Winnipeg, MB, Canada
8 posted 2000-05-13 05:23 PM


thanks dark angel, I'm glad you liked my poem. I will post more in time. thanks again for your replys!!!smiles poe
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