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MrHat Junior Member
since 2000-04-15
Posts 34Gilroy, Ca |
Demons pounding All around me Trap me in this hell They play my fears And leave my ears Ringing like a bell Consumed in raging hellfire Killing all of my desire Bound up in a room Hands tied And legs tied I sense oncoming doom Covered in pads; are all the walls I bounce around them like a ball Let me out! |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Wow, strong words.. this is a stunning poem.. I love the way you have used rhymes here, and your words are just.. well, brilliant. ^_^ such a vivid description.. Hey, i am the first to reply to this ^_^ Lynne |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
~Mr Hat~ Excellent descriptive and expressive piece!  You describe the torment of being trapped inside emotional walls vividly. Very haunting for me to read because I often feel this way. This is the first poem that I have read by you and I am very impressed.Take care, Melissa Honeybee |
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MrHat Junior Member
since 2000-04-15
Posts 34Gilroy, Ca |
Thanks...Im glad you two liked it. "DO NO GO GENTLE INTO THAT GOOD NIGHT" Do not go gentle into that good night, Old age should burn and rave at close of day; Rage, rage against the dying of the light. Though wise men and their end know dark is right, Because their words had forked no lightning they Do not go gentle into that good night. Good men, the last wave by, crying how bright Their frail deeds might have danced in a green bay, Rage, rage against the dying of the light. Wild men who caught the sun in flight, And learn too late, they grieved it on its way, Do not go gentle into that good night. Grave men, near death, who see with blinding sight Blind eyes could blaze like meteors and be gay, Rage, rage against the dying of the light. And you, my father, there on that sad height, Curse, bless, me now with your fierce tears, I pray. Do not go gentle into that good night. Rage, rage against the dying of the light. -Dylan Thomas |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Powerful and well said. I liked this very much. *Krista Knutson* "Lonliness is the human condition." *Mark Twain, in the book "The Adventures of Huckleberry Finn"* |
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Karen Junior Member
since 2000-04-30
Posts 36Utah |
I loved it! Your emotional description was great. It's not very often that people can describe the hell they go through. You did a wonderful job, but I am sorry that you feel so trapped. "Rain comes before Rainbows." |
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