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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments 
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[font face="Arial, Arial, Verdana" color="#CC6600" size="2"]Hey everyone, this is a repost, but I thought since there are so many new people, I thought some of you might like to see one of your moderator's work. This was written March 21st, 2000. Shadows gently stir Voices waft and whisper Floating, streaming, weaving Among the grains of doubt The wind is colored grey- All is unsettled. Moans are strongly purged Draped in scarlet fear Yearning, wanting, feeling Needing to dissolve the pain The sky is closing in- The tempest is created. Emotional inferno ensues Lighted with chaotic flame Licking, hissing, teasing Watching tender life collapse The earth strangled and torn- Peace is savagely murdered. Fire is slowly calmed When droplets of regret form Sliding, tracing, falling Laced with darkened sadness The air is thickly hazed- Tears begin to flood. Ghosts of the past cry Eyes grow slightly chilled Wandering, hoping, waiting Wanting to renew again But the wind is colored grey- All remains unsettled. </font><!signature--> [font face="Arial, Verdana" size="1" color="#FF6600"] *Krista Knutson* As soon as man does not take his existence for granted, but beholds it as something unfathomably mysterious, thought begins. ~*Albert Schweitzer*~[/font] [This message has been edited by Alwye (edited 04-29-2000).] |
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DaZeD&cOnFuSeD Junior Member
since 2000-04-20
Posts 32 |
wow thats a good poem DåzêÐ&CõñfûsëÐ dana |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
This is a fantastic poem Krista. I hadn't seen this one before. Another piece to add to your brilliant bundle  Nice work. ~AF~ "Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement." Christopher Fry |
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sunshine17 Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 89Bonduel, WI USA |
Wow! This poem is pretty much excatly how I feel about my old boyfriend. You did a really good job. I can't remember if I read this before or not, but I still like it. Gina |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
This is beautiful Krista!! I really enjoyed reading it, the words just flowed so well. Great to have you post here again!! Maybe I'll post something sometime too! Love and hugs, Lizzie "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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MrHat Junior Member
since 2000-04-15
Posts 34Gilroy, Ca |
Very nice poem. I hope you post more. "DO NO GO GENTLE INTO THAT GOOD NIGHT" Do not go gentle into that good night, Old age should burn and rave at close of day; Rage, rage against the dying of the light. Though wise men and their end know dark is right, Because their words had forked no lightning they Do not go gentle into that good night. Good men, the last wave by, crying how bright Their frail deeds might have danced in a green bay, Rage, rage against the dying of the light. Wild men who caught the sun in flight, And learn too late, they grieved it on its way, Do not go gentle into that good night. Grave men, near death, who see with blinding sight Blind eyes could blaze like meteors and be gay, Rage, rage against the dying of the light. And you, my father, there on that sad height, Curse, bless, me now with your fierce tears, I pray. Do not go gentle into that good night. Rage, rage against the dying of the light. -Dylan Thomas |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Alwye, this is nice poetry. Good idea to post it for new poets. I think it's a good example of lyric expression. dh A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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son of man Member
since 2000-04-25
Posts 125 |
great metaphor use, vivid display of energetic emotion. a colorful work of genius art. |
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4eva_at_heart Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 238 |
such a beautiful poem Krista you have such a gift...and i bet if you could see my eyes right now...they would be green with envy!!! lol  i love it....great imagery and such strong use of words! Bec i never thought i'd die alone, i laughed the loudest who'd have known? i traced the cord back to the wall, no wonder it was never plugged in at all i took my time, i hurried up the choice was mine i didn't think enough I'm too depressed to go on, you'll be sorry when i'm gone I never conquered, rarely came 16 just held such better days Days when i still felt alive, we couldn't wait to get outside The world was wide, too late to try The tour was over i'd survived I couldn't wait till i got home, to pass the time in my room alone I never thought i'd die alone, another six months I'll be unknown Give all my things to my friends, you'll never set foot in my room again You'll close it off, board it up Remember the time i spilled the cup Of apple juice in the hall, please tell mum this is not her fault I never conquered, rarely came But tomorrow holds such better days Days when i can still feel alive, when i can't wait to get outside The world was wide, the time goes by The tour is over, i've survived I can't wait till i get home, to pass the time in my room alone 'Adam's Song' Blink 182 |
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