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since 1999-12-13
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0 posted 2000-04-21 08:39 PM

thrust in my heart
it drained my lungs
made my mouth go dry
unable to move
it hit hard
jumping in my stomach
and running up my throat
before i knew what happened
it had taken me over
no matter how horrible
it grabs at me endlessly
never to stop

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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850
In the space between moments
1 posted 2000-04-21 10:53 PM

Welcome, Evermore!  Love can indeed bring such feelings, can't it?  Exellent work, keep it up!

 *Krista Knutson*

As soon as man does not take his existence for granted, but beholds it as something unfathomably mysterious, thought begins.
~*Albert Schweitzer*~

since 2000-03-01
Posts 446
not heaven nor hell so...
2 posted 2000-04-21 11:35 PM


This poem was very interesting, I thought that it was almost a bit desperate...(not desperate as in pathetic desperate as in longning for something).  You managed to convey your emotions very well.

If you ever need help with anything...I'm always here.

Love Always,

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since 2000-04-18
Posts 33
3 posted 2000-04-23 08:20 PM

Great work! I loved it!

 *Love is the only thing that keeps me sane* (Sue Townsend)

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since 2000-01-25
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Floating gently on a cloud....
4 posted 2000-04-24 06:23 AM

Whew!! Powerful stuff!! Welcome to Passions!!

Love and hugs,

 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

since 1999-07-26
Posts 152
Brooklyn, NY, USA
5 posted 2000-04-25 11:47 PM

Very nicely written  )
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