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since 1999-07-17
Posts 42
Oak Grove

0 posted 2000-04-18 10:45 PM

Im turning my back on you,
its not my fault, you said were through,
You have pushed me as far as you can,
You have almost took everything from this man,
Now i am moving on,
Mabye now you will realize what is gone,
So now i say goodbye,
I have gave up, not willing to try,
Farewell to you and all your hate,
I am getting out of this depressing state,
You can have your mind games back,
Soon it will be me that you lack,
You only messed with my head,
Made me wishing that I was dead,
So now I am living life like I need to,
I have now figured out, I do not need you.

 "A Love Found Brings A Smile, But The Lost Lost Only Brings Pain"

© Copyright 2000 Jimmy VanNatta - All Rights Reserved
since 1999-08-25
Posts 176
1 posted 2000-04-19 11:27 PM

Wow what a change from the other poems you've written. I'm thinking maybe you have moved on and realized she's not worth all the turmoil you have caused yourself? Well keep up the writing. And good luck.


 "Poetry is the music of the souls, and above all, of great and feeling souls."

Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....
2 posted 2000-04-20 03:01 PM

Hi Jimmy!! Er, methinks I seem to have started with the wrong poem...if Isabelle's reply is anything to go by, there is a whole story behind this strong move you have made. I shall go and check out your other poetry and see what goes/went on!! Meanwhile, this is a very good poem in which you express your position very clearly. Good job!!

Love and hugs,

 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

since 1999-09-23
Posts 322
Vereeniging, South-Africa
3 posted 2000-04-20 04:13 PM

I think it is a good thing that you were able to realize that you can make it with out this person, that there IS a life after love. It is a hard thing to realize, and we don't always want to admit it, but like you said, it's time to move on
Junior Member
since 2000-04-15
Posts 21

4 posted 2000-04-20 05:51 PM

I think it's wonderful that you seemed to have moved on.  This was a VERY powerful piece of poetry.  I enjoyed reading this piece of work....KEEP ON WRITING!


since 2000-03-01
Posts 446
not heaven nor hell so...
5 posted 2000-04-20 08:01 PM

Very powerful and very sad.  Saying goodbye is never easy but often nessessary.  I feel that there was so much passion and thought that went into this, it felt like...there are no words to describe it but I thank you very much for sharing it with us.
I once read that 'love is the sole purpose in life and if you can say that you have loved, truly loved, then you my friend are the luckiest man alive.'
This is true in many ways.
And I hope that you may be the luckiest man alive and find true love.
If you ever need to talk, I'm always here.

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