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Hollow could describe....

The Jackal
Member

since 1999-08-13

Posts 426
Springfield, Massachusetts U.S.A

0 posted 2000-04-18 02:46 PM

hollow could describe
never felt so empty everywhere
inside..and like the ridicule
may they always serve.. the only question
how do you live beneath your nerve
leaving is always open..for the things
no longer protected by lies
pray the broken bones of spite
help me find a home tonight..

Yu Lan
Senior Member

since 2000-04-13

Posts 1462
New Zealand

1 posted 2000-04-19 12:20 PM

Hmmm.. an eery poem.. I like your style..

Lynne

Blue Rose
Junior Member

since 2000-04-20

Posts 18
Vernonia OR USA

2 posted 2000-04-20 07:41 PM

Hi, I'm Blue Rose! I think your poem is wonderful so I thought I would tell you so. I had to go back and read it a couple times, and I understood a little better each time. Keep up the good work!

AngelShell
Member

since 2000-03-01

Posts 446
not heaven nor hell so...

3 posted 2000-04-20 08:05 PM

A moving and thought provoking poem, written with much passion and thought, your feelings were well expressed...anger...don't be so angry, it will get better.

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