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Carly Junior Member
since 2000-04-18
Posts 17Michigan, USA |
The Girl She knows what it's like to cry herself to sleep night after night after night She knows what it's like to sit all alone at lunchtime and only be accompanied by a small paper bag and a ham and cheese sandwich She knows what it's like to feel inferior among her peers and invisible to the surrounding world to be laughed at, not laughed with and be completely misunderstood by everyone She knows what it's like to have no one to share her deepest thoughts and emotions with She knows what it's like to have her feelings tossed about like a worthless pile of rags and turn around to hear her very self-image being destroyed She knows what it's like to roam the world aimlessly searching for something unknown to even herself She knows what it's like to want to end it all... Yet she knows of a different world. She now knows what it's like to laugh herself to sleep She now knows what it's like to sit down and have a crowd gather around her She knows what it's like to be seen and heard by all to laugh, really and truly laugh and have her values and thoughts actually understood by her peers She knows what it's like to be able to share her thoughts and emotions with someone she trusts She knows what it's like to have her feelings valued by others and to be spoken to, not spoken of She knows what it's like to find what she was searching for She knows what it's like to never want this to end She will never forget what it was like... |
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**Angel** Member
since 2000-03-31
Posts 162 |
Welcome to Passions! I am sure you will find this to be a wonderful place.  You have a great piece of writing here. I adore it! I look forward to reading more of your work. Lindsay |
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Carly Junior Member
since 2000-04-18
Posts 17Michigan, USA |
Thanks a lot for your insight... From what I have read in the past whole day I've been here it seems that this place is a good one to be. ~Carly |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
~~nice writing~~~~the way you have written this the expression of both perspectives is appreciated better I think. Good work Carly~~~~~~~~~ A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Oh my goodness...I feel as though you just wrote a poem about me. Wow. This poem just so totally describes me! Thank you so much for sharing it with Passions! Btw, welcome to Passions!!!! I look forwad to your next post! Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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MrHat Junior Member
since 2000-04-15
Posts 34Gilroy, Ca |
I like this poem. The beginning is sad, but I like it. "DO NO GO GENTLE INTO THAT GOOD NIGHT" Do not go gentle into that good night, Old age should burn and rave at close of day; Rage, rage against the dying of the light. Though wise men and their end know dark is right, Because their words had forked no lightning they Do not go gentle into that good night. Good men, the last wave by, crying how bright Their frail deeds might have danced in a green bay, Rage, rage against the dying of the light. Wild men who caught the sun in flight, And learn too late, they grieved it on its way, Do not go gentle into that good night. Grave men, near death, who see with blinding sight Blind eyes could blaze like meteors and be gay, Rage, rage against the dying of the light. And you, my father, there on that sad height, Curse, bless, me now with your fierce tears, I pray. Do not go gentle into that good night. Rage, rage against the dying of the light. -Dylan Thomas |
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rachella Junior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 39Indiana |
Carly, Welcome to Passions! This was a great first poem. I liked the contrast between the two. There is a little bit, if not a whole lot, of each side of this girl in all of us. Thank you for writing it. ~Rachella |
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son of man Member
since 2000-04-25
Posts 125 |
a great insight on how there will always be undesirable happenings, but there is always happiness. i believe happiness is worth all the sorrow in the world. you have written about many of us in this poem. i really enjoyed it. great work! |
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4eva_at_heart Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 238 |
this is terrific!! Welcome to Passions....and such a great first post!!! wow!! the double perspective worked great! i was like feeling really depressed for the girl  and having the ability to drag someone into a poem...make them feel for a character or make them live the poem...is a great achievement! well done!! wish to read more of you work soon Bec i never thought i'd die alone, i laughed the loudest who'd have known? i traced the cord back to the wall, no wonder it was never plugged in at all i took my time, i hurried up the choice was mine i didn't think enough I'm too depressed to go on, you'll be sorry when i'm gone I never conquered, rarely came 16 just held such better days Days when i still felt alive, we couldn't wait to get outside The world was wide, too late to try The tour was over i'd survived I couldn't wait till i got home, to pass the time in my room alone I never thought i'd die alone, another six months I'll be unknown Give all my things to my friends, you'll never set foot in my room again You'll close it off, board it up Remember the time i spilled the cup Of apple juice in the hall, please tell mum this is not her fault I never conquered, rarely came But tomorrow holds such better days Days when i can still feel alive, when i can't wait to get outside The world was wide, the time goes by The tour is over, i've survived I can't wait till i get home, to pass the time in my room alone 'Adam's Song' Blink 182 |
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Carly Junior Member
since 2000-04-18
Posts 17Michigan, USA |
Thanksfor all of your replies! It's great to hear insight like this. I wrote this poem because I felt I needed to let out my feelings. It is written in 3rd person, but I really wrote it from 1st. Thanks again. ~Carly |
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Carly Junior Member
since 2000-04-18
Posts 17Michigan, USA |
Thanks so much for all of your replies! It's great to hear insight like this. I wrote this poem because I felt I needed to let out my feelings. It is written in 3rd person, but I really wrote it from 1st. Thanks again. ~Carly |
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Carly Junior Member
since 2000-04-18
Posts 17Michigan, USA |
Oops, sorry about that! |
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bulletproof2312 Junior Member
since 2000-03-31
Posts 28Beaumont Tx, 77707 |
:What a wonderful message... it's encouraging to know that there is someone else who has exsperianced both ways of life... when you stick in there through the hard times of being alone some of your greatest friends are found, I will never forget the people who came and pulled me out of the solitary confinement I was in... Best of Luck, and welcome to Passions, a truly wonderful place. "Here I stand I can do none other"---Luther |
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Carly Junior Member
since 2000-04-18
Posts 17Michigan, USA |
I want everyone to be able to read this... so *bump*. BTW Thanks again everyone. ~Carly [This message has been edited by Carly (edited 05-13-2000).] |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
NOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!! "Your joy is your sorrow unmasked. And the self-same well from which your laughter rises was often-times filled with your tears." ~Kahil Gibran |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
 I want everyone to be able to read this, so I'm going to bump it again! *bump* |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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