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anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

0 posted 2000-04-14 05:59 AM

My solitude is building,
Into a ball of emotions.
I seep further into my mist,
Of callous memories and pain.

The shadows that stretch upon the walls,
Conceal my wounded body.
My mind is in tatters,
And my heart is shredded into tiny pieces.

I am a despondent soul,
An urn full of anguish.
The futile days halt my pursuit,
Of ever being a real person.

All that remains of me,
Are the eyes of once a great individual.
I am now a horrific creature,
That preys on the suffering of others.

My gloomy eyes cast darkness,
Over the meaningful lifes of others.
My mortality has been stripped,
I am the sombre soul.

[This message has been edited by anonymousfemale (edited 04-15-2000).]

ESP
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since 2000-01-25

Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....

1 posted 2000-04-14 06:18 AM

Whoa.....why are you so despondent? Try and be happy, it won't just happen. Smile at everyone you meet and most likely they will return it to you! C'mon A.F., cheer up honey! The world isn't over yet....blue skies around the corner...

Love and hugs,
Lizzie

"Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

2 posted 2000-04-14 07:05 AM

Thanks Lizzie but this poem actually isn't about me. I just thought I should try for a descriptive piece. But thanks all the same

~AF~

"Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement."
Christopher Fry

jamesjiao
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since 2000-04-12

Posts 268
Backwaters of Avalon

3 posted 2000-04-14 07:22 AM

Wow, I don't know what to say, this is just so GOOD, the best one i have found in the teen section so far!! I think you are definitely ready to go to Corner Club. Gee, I am going to give this poem to my friend who also writes this sort of poems

Jõmes

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

4 posted 2000-04-14 09:39 AM

Thanks alot James. That is quite a compliment.

~AF~

"Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement."
Christopher Fry

Danny Holloway
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since 2000-01-15

Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK

5 posted 2000-04-14 12:15 PM

So much expression coming from this piece.
Nice writing.

A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives.

**Angel**
Member

since 2000-03-31

Posts 162

6 posted 2000-04-14 03:00 PM

This is an amazing poem. Wow! I am speechless.

Thank you for this poem.

Lindsay

Yu Lan
Senior Member

since 2000-04-13

Posts 1462
New Zealand

7 posted 2000-04-15 06:24 AM

Hey, this is a great poem!!! haunting.. I am just going to keep typing exclamation marks, 'coz I can't think of a compliment good enough to give this poem.. !! hehe..

really nice piece of writing, a/f..

Lynne

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