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Yu Lan
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since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462
New Zealand

0 posted 2000-04-14 12:08 PM

Forgive Me

A soft jagged edge,
Calmly screams at me.
Through my mind.
I plead for it’s forgiveness,
Hoping for redemption,
All is lost;
There is nothing to forgive.

© Copyright 2000 Lynne Miura, née Chudley - All Rights Reserved
since 2000-04-12
Posts 268
Backwaters of Avalon
1 posted 2000-04-14 02:54 AM

Welcome to Passion, Yu Lan. Good poem but unfortunately, no one here appreciates it, try the corner club. ^_^


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since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....
2 posted 2000-04-14 05:25 AM

This is a beautiful poem! Welcome to Passions! We are glad to have you here! Stick around in this forum for a while, I'm sure people will respond soon. You should also try the corner pub...I post in both is very friendly in there and you  would be most welcome!! Stay in both...they are both gr8!!

Love and hugs,

since 2000-02-12
Posts 238

3 posted 2000-04-14 05:33 AM

and your first post is great...the words you used are so powerful!!
great first post and hope to hear more from you


since 1999-12-02
Posts 148
Fredonia, NY USA
4 posted 2000-04-14 10:26 AM

This was a really great poem...very powerful.  And a great first post.  It's hard when you don't get a lot of feedback, but keep on posting!!  I can't wait to read more.


Danny Holloway
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since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK
5 posted 2000-04-14 12:27 PM

<font face="Arial, Arial, Verdana" color="#ff0000" size="2">Very nice poem.  So emotional and desparate!
Welcome to Passions.  Will be looking for more of your writing.</font><!signature-->

<font face="Arial, Verdana" size="1" color="#000080"> A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives.


[This message has been edited by Danny Holloway (edited 04-14-2000).]

since 2000-03-31
Posts 162

6 posted 2000-04-14 02:57 PM

Welcome to Passions Yu Lan. I have enjoyed reading your poem. I would love to read more!


Yu Lan
Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462
New Zealand
7 posted 2000-04-14 08:09 PM

Thanx ppl! ^_^ yes, I will post some of my poetry in the Corner Pub too..
Grrr.. James.. don't be rude.. hehe.. joking.. ^_^


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