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0 posted 2000-04-13 02:06 PM

The Way
The way he sits and looks at me, makes me feel like flying.  The way he laughs at me makes my heart drop.  The was he puts knifes through my heart and makes me want to cry.  The was he hurts me like know one else, makes me want to die.  The way he makes me feel like crap, and kills me with his words.  I don't think he realizes how much he makes me hurt.
The way his words mean so much, the way he rocks my world. The way he makes the butterflies sore, in my stomache, when he walks by.  The way he makes me laught but usually makes me cry.
Oh, the way he makes me love him no one will ever know the way.


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1 posted 2000-04-13 04:38 PM

first off I'd like to welcome you to passions, I do so hope you enjoy your stay.

Second, it is a very nice poem, tho it has a very sad theme, I might suggest however, that a bit of it seems not to flow with the general rythem.

Anywho, very sad, I do hope that it all turn out all right, if you ever need a friend to talk to, I'm more than willing to listen.

 "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \
I am lost in my own mind.

Some say the world will end in fire,
Some say in ice
From what I've tasted of desire,
I hold with those who favor fire.
But if it had to perish twice,
I think I know enough of hate
To say that for destruction ice
Is also great,
And would suffice.
-Robert Frost

since 2000-03-31
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2 posted 2000-04-13 05:10 PM

Welcome to Passions. I hope we can see more of your work!
Excellent is so sad but very good!

If you want to talk just let me know.


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since 2000-01-13
Posts 528
North Carolina
3 posted 2000-04-13 07:18 PM

Very well-said, and I must say, very appropriate title. I can feel your pain here, cause I've experienced such feelings as well. Great job by the way!  


 *There is no destination where we are
Please take me somewhere far
Far away from this world of mine*
(by me)

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Posts 2797
4 posted 2000-04-13 08:51 PM

Firstly welcome to Passions!

Secondly, this is a good poem to enter in with. This poem holds so much truth in what makes us churn about an ex.

Nice work.


 "Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement."
Christopher Fry

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since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....
5 posted 2000-04-14 12:42 PM

Welcome to Passions!! This is a great first full of emotion.

Love and hugs,

 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

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