navwin » Archives » Teen Poetry #2 » untitled (suggestions please)
Teen Poetry #2
Post A Reply Post New Topic untitled (suggestions please) Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794
In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV

0 posted 2000-04-09 10:33 AM

My horoscope was almost always right,
And today’s said I’d lose a love.

I saw you drive by once,
You turned around and came back.

My horoscope had been right,
I’d lost the only person I ever loved.

You drove by again, and stopped,
You asked if I wanted a ride.

Not typical of me, I accepted,
I thought maybe you’d take me away.

You drove me around, until I smiled,
We began to speak, and even planned a date.

My horoscope forgot to mention,
That I would meet someone that would care.

We lived less than a mile apart,
But had never met before that night.

The girls laughed and giggled when I told them,
“It will never work out” is all they said.

That was three years ago,
Now they’re just amazed.

He holds me just right,
Oh, how I love him so.

 (if ya ever wanna chat, you can IM me on AOL: sexikitticat -or- pom16pom)

© Copyright 2000 Tamma M. Wilson - All Rights Reserved
Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....
1 posted 2000-04-09 12:16 PM

"Love isn't always foretold"....just a suggestion...I'm not so good at these title things myself but anyways.

Love and hugs,

Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada
2 posted 2000-04-09 03:11 PM

Before I get to a title suggestion, where did you lose a love in this? Alright....title suggestion. "Fortold", "A Date of Fate", "In the Cards". Something along these lines? What do you think?
Danny Holloway
Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK
3 posted 2000-04-14 12:41 PM

I like "Lasting Love".  I do agree with Marilyn though, sounds like a gain, not a lose.
Nice writing Tamma.

 A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives.

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Teen Poetry #2 » untitled (suggestions please)

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary