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0 posted 2000-04-11 05:57 AM

darkness be my friend
your the only one who's near
you taught me how to hate and envy
you taught me how to fear

darkness be my saviour
your grasp on me is firm
you comfort me from reality
you offer obscurity which i yearn

darkness be my master
your existence i hold in awe
you have a majestic power
you have opened up the door

darkness be my enemy
your companionship was not right
you offered me a life
then you showed me the light

 "tears are the essence of our souls"

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Floating gently on a cloud....
1 posted 2000-04-11 06:36 AM

I am glad darkness eventually became the enemy! This is a really good poem.

Love and hugs,

 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is a rainbow of delight."

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2 posted 2000-04-11 06:48 AM

This is a really good poem. It is good to see that you pulled through.  

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3 posted 2000-04-11 07:59 AM

I'm happy you found the light, 'cause light allways wins from darkness, luckily

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4 posted 2000-04-12 05:34 PM

Really good poem.  It's good you found the light.  It's always much happier there!  Tara
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5 posted 2000-04-13 05:05 PM

This is an excellent poem. Keep posting!


Yu Lan
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since 2000-04-13
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6 posted 2000-04-13 08:44 PM

I enjoy reading your poetry..

Darkness is not always bad, but u must be able to see both the darkness and the light, and live in between.. then u may be enlightened...
An awesome poem.. I love the last few lines.. the darkness betrayed you there..

great writing..


Danny Holloway
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7 posted 2000-04-14 12:50 PM

You had me swirling on this one.  Darkness by my friend, but the things it taught you were not good things. The end was good though.
Nice writing.

 A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives.

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