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Attempting to trust
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since 2000-03-31
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0 posted 2000-03-31 03:55 AM

  All right-
        I'm here-
              open and honest-
        soul completely naked.

  Hopes, dreams, truths, lies, fears, memories,
        lying scattered-
              all on the floor-
        a child's playthings.

  Only guarded more carefully-
        so please-
              dear love...
        step lightly.

© Copyright 2000 Lily - All Rights Reserved
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since 2000-02-02
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1 posted 2000-03-31 04:01 AM

Ok, first things first, welcome to passions. You have chose a lovely poem to enter here with and I will look forward to reading more of your work  


 What doesn't kill you only makes you stronger

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Floating gently on a cloud....
2 posted 2000-03-31 04:37 AM

Welcome to the family of Passions! It is great to have you in this forum. I like your first post a whole lot and can't wait to see more of your work!

Love and hugs,

Danny Holloway
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since 2000-01-15
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3 posted 2000-03-31 02:55 PM

This is very good.  I like the structure and the expression.  I don't believe this is the first poem you've written.  It shows good imagination and style i think.
Nice work, and Welcome!
Post more of your work.

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4 posted 2000-03-31 03:34 PM

Welcome to passions! Great poem, I liked it.

-- Crystal

 "The worst of what people do to one another is deceive.
Because when you love someone you control their version
of reality. If you lie to them that's like making them
autistic so that what they believe is reality is in fact,
not their true situation at all."

It's not the angry words that break the heart, it's the silence.

Someone said that true love is like a ghost -- often spoke of but never seen.
I've seen both and yet in my darkest hours, tend to believe that neither exits.

since 2000-02-12
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5 posted 2000-03-31 09:53 PM

welcome to passions! you''ll love it here
great poem to start off with....i know that a heart is not a plaything


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6 posted 2000-03-31 11:02 PM

Great first post!!! Danny said it all for me...8o)
welcome welcome (hope to see more from you!!)

Attempting to trust
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since 2000-03-31
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7 posted 2000-04-01 02:09 AM

Thank you, everyone, for your very kind replies! All of you are very considerate.
Danny -- you are right, this is not a first poem by any means. I have written a great deal, but only when the mood strikes me.
I would also like to say that I am not a teen, but thought I would post in here instead of the open forum because most of my writing looked more like the stuff in here instead of what was in there.
Anyway - thanks again for all the welcomes and wonderful replies!

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since 2000-04-01
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8 posted 2000-04-01 02:31 AM

I like your poem a lot!
It is how a lot of people feel.
Look forward to more of your poetry!

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since 2000-01-13
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North Carolina
9 posted 2000-04-01 04:07 PM

Your title is so.....appropriate. I enjoyed this poem ever so much, it has a dream-like quality to it, yet it is powerful and sincere. Sehr gut! <I'm not German, just learning the language> Beautiful, inspiring, innocent...........mahvelous dahling.  

Giving you a big thumbs up,

 *There is no destination where we are
Please take me somewhere far
Far away from this world of mine*
(by me)

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since 2000-03-09
Posts 522
Missouri, USA
10 posted 2000-04-01 04:19 PM

ah hoy, great poem. Keep up the good work, and when I have time (damn 'rents) I hope to see more from ya. Welcome to passions.

 "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." I am lost in my own mind.

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