|Teen Poetry #2|
|it will all be over soon|
since 2000-03-09Posts 95
right now i cant be with you
i cant handle the pain
i really dont know what to do
all i know is im going insane
the time ill stay away has no determined size
ill show up at your door
with tears in my eyes
even though i know youll love me nevermore
friends to the end well alwayse be
and that couldnt make me more glad
but ill alwayse want you closer to me
and i think there will alwayse be a part of me that will be sad
but ill get over it
"scribere iussit amor" love commanded me to write
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since 2000-02-02Posts 2797
ahh the inforgettable line between friendships and relationships are sometimes crossable, but what is meant to be will be and if you really want this person, you will have them in the end.
Otherwise great poem.
since 1999-11-13Posts 251
good poem -- just a little response:
this pain you feel
it hurts me too.
it's become all too real,
the fact that you are gone
so i will give you this space
and hope that you're back soon
because no one wil ever replace
the whole in me you fill
there is a fine line between
friends and more than such
and you will always mean
more than such.
since 2000-01-14Posts 478
I like this poem a lot.
I know the feeling all too well...
since 2000-03-25Posts 49
united states of america
this is a subject that i think nearly all of humankind is well-acquainted with (sadly). let me say that true friendships do not end this way. if this person realizes how he/she hurt you, and if he/she truly cares about you, then they will welcome you back with open arms and a forgiving heart.
poetically i like this piece, though i really didn't care for the last line, and i also feel that the next-to-last line could use some reshaping. perhaps consider combining the two ideas expressed there into a more concise statement of sorrow and resolution? just a suggestion.
the beautiful freak
since 2000-01-25Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....
That line, crossed many times, I hope you find happiness in the end.
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