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pharon Member
since 1999-11-13
Posts 251alabama |
i don't understand what it is you see in me. why are you so attached? don't you want to be free? all i have caused you is hurt and endless pain. what is it i do that brings you back again? words cannot express how much it is you mean to me but i don't deserve tenderness from you or anyone else. how can you tolerate me? i am a wrecking ball slowly destroying everyone, anything at all. |
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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
Ummm... how about something like "I don't deserve you" "You deserve better" *can't be serious any more, just had a very serious conversation with a friend* or how about "I like butter" or "Got love" . . . ?? actualy, that last one is good...... "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." I am lost in my own mind. |
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dazed Member
since 2000-03-13
Posts 119USA |
umm dunno what title to give... but it sounds like this person loves you and thats why they keep coming back.. I know call it "Keep coming back" or why do you come back? I dunno forget it.. good job though Dana |
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angel6917 Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 478WI |
I dunno what to call this poem, but I do like it. I think the person keeps coming back because they love you, and they want to be with you no matter what pain you might cause. It happens that way sometimes... ~Kristi Lynn |
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Singer1981 Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 148Fredonia, NY USA |
This is a good poem. I agree with everyone else in saying that the person probably loves you, and whatever you make them go through, they've decided to stick by you. As for a title...maybe.."no pain, no gain", because really, with love always comes a little pain and heartache. Keep up the good work!! ~Sarah |
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