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since 2000-03-15
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The Dalles, Oregon, USA

0 posted 2000-03-15 06:21 PM

   I plead guilty to love in the highest degree.

             But my love isn't of lust

      It is that of the deepest friendship.
Like the deepest blue of the sunset on warm sumers night.

It is that of the warmest passion of sweet lovers.
Like thw warm sand on your fee during a midnight  
strole on the beach.

It is that of the stillest commitment of newly weds.
Like the stillness of the midnight stars on your soul.

So you see if loving my deepest friend, My warmest  passion, And My stillest commitment is wrong;
       than I don't whant to be right.

            And if all this is a crime.
      I plead guilty to love in highest degree.


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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850
In the space between moments
1 posted 2000-03-15 10:07 PM

Very lovely, well said work!  Welcome to Passions, we're glad to have you!  

 *Krista Knutson*

I do this so this world will know that it will not change me....-GB

since 2000-03-13
Posts 119
2 posted 2000-03-15 10:21 PM

Great work and very romantic
I would like to see more of your work...

since 2000-01-14
Posts 478
3 posted 2000-03-16 09:45 AM

Welcome To Passions,
first of all.

I like this poem a lot,
and look forward to seeing more of your work in the future.
~Kristi Lynn

Danny Holloway
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since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK
4 posted 2000-03-16 11:18 AM

Steven, I like the premise of this work.  There were some typos and the layout is distracting.  However, you express your emotion well and I think it is a unique approach to expressing friendship.
Welcome to Passions.

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since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada
5 posted 2000-03-16 12:57 PM

Welcome to Passions. I have to agree with Danny. The typo's and the presentation is distracting. As for the theme of the piece, I enjoyed it very much. I hope to see more of your work.  
since 1999-12-02
Posts 148
Fredonia, NY USA
6 posted 2000-03-16 05:23 PM

I think that this poem is lovely.  Whoever you wrote this about is lucky to have you as a friend!  Great first post!  can't wait to read more.

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