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For The Girl I Love Most
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For The Girl I Love Most |
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NewbiePoetGuy Junior Member
since 2000-03-14
Posts 13Thousand Oaks, Ca, USA |
My Dear, I love you that is true. But what, i say has become of you? You have gone away, perhaps never to return. But then why does my soul still burn? Is it the way you comforted me when i was down? Or how even when I went psycho you still stayed around? I cannot put into words how I feel. But I do know that this is real. My love for you will always be. If I had one wish it would be to have you here, right here with me. But if you should find your one true love, and it not be me. Then I would be saddened, but joyous to see you happy. Forever and always is my oath. For if something should ever take me away, and I go to heaven. I would still shine down down upon you, and protect you in your times of trial. For you are the one, and the only thing that is important to me. Please just love me and be mine do I plead. But never I fear, will that come to pass. For you have disappeared like a squirrel into a field of grass. So as tried and true as the feeling I get when I hold your hand. I love you dear more than any other man. My love for you will not fade as the years pass and we grow older. For this love burns in my heart like a fire that can never be smoldered. I love you dear and that is that. So please my dear, come back.... come back.... come back. |
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emptyness Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 95mobile,Ala,USA |
excellent work i feel the same way about a girl in my life and if you are feeling the way i feel the only thing that can help is..well i havent found it but if you do shave the knowlage again good job and welcome to passions "scribere iussit amor" love commanded me to write |
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pharon Member
since 1999-11-13
Posts 251alabama |
great job!! you have the rhyming thing down pat  a litte tip -- you don't HAVE to have a period at the end of each stanza, if you lost a couple it might flow better. besides that the poem rocked!!! welcome to passions :> |
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huney_mel Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 52 |
this is really sweet. I really feel this way about someone ...well i did...and im trying to get over them. I have been trying to get over them for 3 years. I dont think i will tho....i think my love is always gonna be there and always will be there Love mel |
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dazed Member
since 2000-03-13
Posts 119USA |
Hey newbiepoetguy great poem I wrote one pretty much about the same thing yesterday..I broke up with my man even though I loved him alot. dana |
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dazed Member
since 2000-03-13
Posts 119USA |
ok wait a min... are you gay or are you straight?? It doesnt matter I was just curious cause at the top of the poem it sayds its for a girl in the end it says about a guy dazed |
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NewbiePoetGuy Junior Member
since 2000-03-14
Posts 13Thousand Oaks, Ca, USA |
hehehe thanks everyone i really hope you enjoyed reading it. and dazed it is about a girl, and i was saying that i love her more than any other man ever could, sorry about the mix up hehe thanks again all, and Gods Speed |
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dazed Member
since 2000-03-13
Posts 119USA |
OOPS MY BAD HEHEEHE SORRY LOL Dana |
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Singer1981 Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 148Fredonia, NY USA |
Newbie, This is really beautiful. It's great that you can express your feelings like that. Geez...I miss all these great poems the week I'm away! Can't wait to read more of yours! ~Sarah |
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JennyeMeshan Member
since 2000-02-15
Posts 103Cecil, Wisconsin USA |
Newbie, I wish I had a guy like you who loved me that much. Unfortunately, I don't. Just keep in mind that love comes and goes. Friends stay forever and I'm dedfinatly a friend...I promise.  )~JeNnYeMeShAn~ "If thou can wait then thou shall stay" -Destiny's Child |
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angel6917 Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 478WI |
NewbiePoetGuy~ I understand exactly where this poem is coming from- Straight from your heart. I like it a lot. I have to agree with Jennye that loves come and go, but friends are forever. I see it as love only stays if it was meant to be. I wish you luck in finding that special someone. ~Kristi Lynn |
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NewbiePoetGuy Junior Member
since 2000-03-14
Posts 13Thousand Oaks, Ca, USA |
Hey everyone, thanks again for all the encouraging messages, im really new at writing thses and even though i wouldnt really stop, its always nice to hear that someone enjoys your work thanks again all |
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