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emptyness Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 95mobile,Ala,USA |
i left you all alone in the night but im cold when we were together we were warm and i ran into the darkness into the cold you came after me trying to get me warm again but i kept running part of me didnt want to be warm part of me was afraid to be warm you never stopped you never gave up you looked for me until you found me laying on the ground covered with ice then you laid on the ground you got colder then we were together frozen in ice "scribere iussit amor" love commanded me to write |
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SwEEt&iNnOcCeNt Junior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 45 |
emptyness wonderful poem! i hope to see more out of you!! this is a wonderful poem and it really toches a place in some peoples heart that knows how it feels!! keep up the wonderful work!! when i was lying with you in the coldness underneath the ice wondering why i was chasing you when all you did was run away from me You left me in the cold you left me behind to wonder alone Why should i lay beside you in the coldness in the ice?? when you dont really love me. I dont want to be warm I want to be cold! never again i want to love anyone you put pain and hurt in my heart. so i'm leaving you here to lay in the coldness underneath the ice! ~song~ I never thought you were a fool or a friend you never let me down you were ture to the end.. and in the darkes hour when all is lost some how you left the light on you fast the worng you showed the world a thing or two stud up for me and you... sorry i can't finish the rest!!! wonderful poem got to go!!!! |
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JennyeMeshan Member
since 2000-02-15
Posts 103Cecil, Wisconsin USA |
Very great poem! It got me thinking a little! I like it alot! Keep writing! ~JeNnYeMeShAn~ "If thou can wait then thou shall stay" -Destiny's Child |
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4eva_at_heart Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 238 |
i like this alot!!!! may i ask..have you ever fallen in love and been hurt? because the feeliings illustarted in your piece sounds familiar to that of a friend o f mine who fell in love, had her heart broken, and now is scared to care for another person so strongly for fear of being hurt again  Overall a great poem!! i like the contrast between warmth and cold...your theme came through clearly Bec |
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SwEEt&iNnOcCeNt Junior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 45 |
4eva_at_heart: to answer your question yes i have. I know how your friend feels and i feel the same way! i'm scared that i will be hurt again! and never beable to be happy again. so yes i have and i know where you friends comeing from. aNd tOo JennYe ThaNk YoU very much... emptyness is a wonderful poet and its kinda fun to respond as the other person he's talking to!! |
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angel6917 Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 478WI |
Emptyness~ I love this poem, and I must admit that every poem that I read by you seems so much better than the last. Keep up the good work. ~Kristi Lynn |
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Jer Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 443USA |
Good poem. I think just about every person in Passions can relate with your work. Good job. Hope to read more. |
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Tara Member
since 2000-02-21
Posts 76Minnesota |
I totally agree with Kristi Lynn. Every one of your poems keeps getting better and better. So far I've been able to relate to almost all your poems. I love them. Keep up the good work. Tara |
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pharon Member
since 1999-11-13
Posts 251alabama |
wonderful job -- i can relate to this so well!  |
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