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emptyness Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 95mobile,Ala,USA |
a dream can be a wounderful thing it can give you something to talk about to new friens it can give you a laugh it can help you with problems in the true world a dream can be devestating keeping you from sleeping waking you up at 3:00 am the can make you cry and show someone you love dying or leaving a dream some people dont dream or at least dont remember them they are not haunted by nightmares or helped by by the answers revealed in dreams i dont know to feel sorry for them or envy them |
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Astraea Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 378California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now |
 Good poem. Dreams can be scary things, can't they? Especially when they're interpreted wrong and you overlook something you should have noticed. Just a few missing letters here and there and some missing punctuation, but it didn't really take the attention away from the poem's point. Very lovely. You watch, emptyness, if you begin to write poetry with no spelling errors [as I've often done; grammar doesn't really count in poetry as spelling does, I think, unless it's written like that], your poem will shine through like a star. Again, good poem.~Astraea "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness." "Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things." |
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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
heh, ya, dreams can be a lot of different things. Personaly I like dreams, good, bad, any kind of dream. You can see many diffent things in your dreams, many times you can see things that you secretly desire but never new it It is a very nice poem. Very very nice, I like it."Sa souvraya niende missian ye." I am lost in my own mind. ;) |
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pharon Member
since 1999-11-13
Posts 251alabama |
very nice this is a poem everyone can relate to! keep dreaming, never be envious of those that don't because w/o dreams, we would all be lost! |
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