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pharon
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since 1999-11-13
Posts 251
alabama

0 posted 2000-03-11 01:13 AM


children dying
people crying
what is this world coming to?
babies lives
stopped by knives
where did we go wrong?
wives cheating
husbands beating
what is this world coming to?
God's forsaken
lives are taken
where did we go wrong?

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DragonFang
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since 2000-03-09
Posts 522
Missouri, USA
1 posted 2000-03-11 01:19 AM


oh wow.... I love the construction of the poem.... but at the same time it just makes me want to cry...

As to a title, well I've never been very good at titles, but how about something simple, a one word question such as "Why?" or perhaps an emotion that is fitting to the poem, like "Despair" that is all I can really help you with, why do these always come up when I'm half alseep??

emptyness
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since 2000-03-09
Posts 95
mobile,Ala,USA
2 posted 2000-03-11 01:23 AM


i agree with dragonfang why would be an exclent title  nice job
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