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Teen Poetry #2

The Dreams Will Come

EagleScorpion
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since 2000-03-08

Posts 1644
Here, Now, Forever

0 posted 2000-03-11 12:58 PM

THE DREAMS WILL COME

Beneath the shroud, proclaimed aloud,
Under a glowing moon,
A bitter thirst, hurts the worst,
Swept away by a love monsoon,
A girl so mere, a love to fear,
Her compassion sheds my tears,
I try to run, but my fate has won,
and one day the dreams will come,
It smolders unsevered,
It festers forever,
It's eating me alive,
The nectar of life, the lord of my stryfe,
into this void I dive,
As does she, confides in me,
She fears what will become,
Unable to die, it will survive,
and one day, the dreams will come.

pharon
Member

since 1999-11-13

Posts 251
alabama

1 posted 2000-03-11 01:17 AM

you should be proud of yourself -- i am at a loss for words, and that never happens (lol) but seriously...beautifully written!

emptyness
Member

since 2000-03-09

Posts 95
mobile,Ala,USA

2 posted 2000-03-11 01:52 AM

i really dont know why but i really like this poem ive read it like ten times trying to figure out why but i cant figure it out that is a sign of good work

DragonFang
Senior Member

since 2000-03-09

Posts 522
Missouri, USA

3 posted 2000-03-11 01:56 AM

I like I like, nothing else to say other than I like. *has a song stuck in his head, is almost ready to start singing it.... changes track and goes on ready more poetry*

Alwye

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since 1999-06-16

Posts 3850
In the space between moments

4 posted 2000-03-11 11:09 PM

Stunning! The imagery here is exellent! You have great talent, I'll be looking for more.

*Krista Knutson*

I do this so this world will know that it will not change me....-GB

EagleScorpion
Senior Member

since 2000-03-08

Posts 1644
Here, Now, Forever

5 posted 2000-03-12 02:34 AM

hey thanks a bunch
if your looking for more youll find them in Open poetry6. i hope u'll like 'em!

4eva_at_heart
Member

since 2000-02-12

Posts 238

6 posted 2000-03-12 09:16 AM

this is such an excellent pome! great use of words and rhyme. i am so blown away!
keep up the great poetry

Bec

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