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since 1999-11-13
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0 posted 2000-03-11 12:17 PM

Every day i look at you
And know the pain
I've put you through.
After all, you won't
Let me forget.
But your not the only one
Who feels hurt.
Your not the only one
Struggling through each day.
Each night.

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since 1999-11-09
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1 posted 2000-03-11 12:21 PM

To the point and nicely put.  Very good.  Being reminded of the pain you cause, blatantly ignoring the pain you have, is a very sad thing that we wish others could see.  Very lovely.


 "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness."

"Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things."

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2 posted 2000-03-11 12:48 PM

You aren't alone. I am watching you.
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3 posted 2000-03-11 12:53 PM

straight to the point. kinda feels like it is trying to be a splash of cold water. I like it.    
since 2000-02-21
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4 posted 2000-03-11 01:00 AM

It is so amazing how someone else can write exactly what you are feeling.  This totally expresses what I feel.  I really like how you wrote this.  It's just kinda freaks me out that (if this is a true poem written about yourself) someone else in the world feels exactly how I feel.  That person just won't let you forget the pain you caused them, but at the same time you're hurting too.  Wow, that's crazy.  Very nicely written.
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