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pharon Member
since 1999-11-13
Posts 251alabama |
Every day i look at you And know the pain I've put you through. After all, you won't Let me forget. But your not the only one Who feels hurt. Your not the only one Struggling through each day. Each night. |
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Astraea Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 378California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now |
To the point and nicely put. Very good. Being reminded of the pain you cause, blatantly ignoring the pain you have, is a very sad thing that we wish others could see. Very lovely. ~Astraea "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness." "Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things." |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
You aren't alone. I am watching you. |
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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
straight to the point. kinda feels like it is trying to be a splash of cold water. I like it.   |
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Tara Member
since 2000-02-21
Posts 76Minnesota |
It is so amazing how someone else can write exactly what you are feeling. This totally expresses what I feel. I really like how you wrote this. It's just kinda freaks me out that (if this is a true poem written about yourself) someone else in the world feels exactly how I feel. That person just won't let you forget the pain you caused them, but at the same time you're hurting too. Wow, that's crazy. Very nicely written. |
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