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A new love found.
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A new love found. |
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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
This is probably one of my best poems that I've ever written. I wrote it for a girl that I liked last year. I hope you all enjoy it. In a World beyond Hope, In a World without a Chance, I really didn't know how to cope, Every passing thought like a lance. A World that knew not Peace, A World that knew not of Love, There was a swan among geese, As beautiful as a white dove. And then I saw it, and all was right. A World covered by Shadow, A World never knowing Light, Then like a river's flow, It came in all of it's might. And then I saw it, and all was right. In a World with a new Hope, A World with a a Chance, I Have found a way to cope, Now all of my thoughts dance. And now I have it, with no need to fight. |
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AngelDust Junior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 30Minnesota |
Very Nice DragonFang, and welcome to Passions! (I just joined too!) The poem is very well written, and who ever recieved that one sure was a lucky girl! -Angel- "I'll lay around and wonder why you were always there for me" - Sugar Ray - Someday |
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Astraea Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 378California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now |
Lovely poem. I would love for a guy to give me this as a poem. I hope you enjoy your stay here at Passions and, of course, at the Teen Forum. I especially like the pattern in this. Very nice. ~Astraea "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness." "Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things." |
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angel6917 Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 478WI |
I like this one even more than the first one I read. The girl you wrote it for must have been very special. I'd melt if someone wrote something like that for me.... I look forward to seeing more of your work soon. ~Kristi Lynn  |
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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
Okay, I typed that up a little fast last night, made a couple of mistakes, first off, the first verse also has the "And then I saw..." and the second was just an omited word in the last verse, here is one that is all better. Also, thank you all, it is nice to be apreciated. In a World beyond Hope, In a World without a Chance, I really didn't know how to cope, Every passing thought like a lance. And then I saw it, and all was right. A World that knew not Peace, A World that knew not of Love, There was a swan among geese, As beautiful as a white dove. And then I saw it, and all was right. A World covered by Shadow, A World never knowing Light, Then like a river's flow, It came in all of it's might. And then I saw it, and all was right. In a World with a new Hope, A World with a second Chance, I Have found a way to cope, Now all of my thoughts dance. And now I have it, with no need to fight. |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Very beautiful work here, DragonFang. I haven't yet had a chance to welcome you, so welcome to passions! We're glad to have you!  *Krista Knutson* "Every moment marked with apparitions of your soul...." ~*Sarah McLachlan- Do What You Have To Do*~ |
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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
Thank you, I always like to be appreciated. And I am VERY glad that I found this site, amazing what entering random urls can do for ya |
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4eva_at_heart Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 238 |
this is fantatic! all i can say is what a lucky girl! i like the way in which you have looked at love (presuming that's the feeling you're protraying) as a perspective of new hope in a seemingly unstable reality. this is heaps good Bec |
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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
heh, actualy when I wrote it I was talking about friendship. But it was seen as love so much that I decided that "A new love found" would be a very fitting tittle, and I guess in a way I was speaking of love also, as I DO love all of my close friends. So either way, it works. "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." I am lost in my own mind. |
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