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emptyness Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 95mobile,Ala,USA |
i always liked her from the first time we met but she had another guy so i had to wait i finally got up the guts and asked her on a date she said she had a game mabey next week we started going out and yeah we had some fun i think i truely loved her but i dont know if i was really loved we had less and less time together her games alwayse came first but i really dont think missing one practice would have hurt her that bad we decided to salvage our friendship and break things off i simply agreed even though it killed me now they say absence makes the heart grow fonder but for me absence only brings pain and sleepless nights i try to tell her how i feel but either choke or say the wrong things mabey shes hardheaded or mabey she just dosent want me anymore i think i have a plan to get her back ill let yall know if it works she took my heart away and wont return it and i dont want to hurt her but i need my life back or our life back either way i will never truely get over her. thanks for listening i would really like some input to |
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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
How about, "A Love Lost I" Sorry, my mind isn't feeling really creative right now; I've had a really raugh week. |
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pharon Member
since 1999-11-13
Posts 251alabama |
great poem!!:> you write w/so much emotion. i'm sure things will work out between you and this girl, even if you don't get back together - i'll bet she cares about you too and hurts just as much. you should try talking to her or WRITING to her, even if it's poetry. -- pharon -- |
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angel6917 Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 478WI |
A great poem, written right from the heart. I wish you luck in getting her back, and remember that even if it doesn't work, there's someone out there for you, just give it time. I know that it might hurt, but you just have to keep your chin up and look at the bright side of things. ~Kristi Lynn |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
A title would be tough because your writing here is like a conversation. Maybe "yearning heart" or "my love for you" Not knowing your age or the age of the person your speaking about, it may be that you are seeking more in the relationship than she wants to give. Maybe you should give it some time. Time has a way of solving a lot of situations. Good luck and Welcome to Passions. |
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