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0 posted 2000-03-05 05:37 PM

What do you think your doing?
Who the hell are you?
To tell me that my love for him,
Is not going to be true.

You don't know him well enough,
To judge just from looks.
Isn't that the one thing,
That you should never do to books?

The way that you spoke of him,
Makes my blood rise.
I would rather be with him,
Then listen to your lies.

So just keep your opinions,
Locked inside your head.
In fact, no, go away,
I would rather that instead.

© Copyright 2000 Elizabeth Johnson - All Rights Reserved
Paul Hoekman
since 1999-12-28
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1 posted 2000-03-05 07:12 PM

This is a very touchy subject
I can feel, who is this person who
does'nt agree with you?
Not a friend,A parent?

since 2000-02-21
Posts 76
2 posted 2000-03-06 12:03 PM

you know i used to have this exact problem.  my mom and my best friend absolutely hated my boyfriend, as well as many of my other friends.  they always said bad things about him and it made me really angry and pushed me away from them.  i lost many of my friends.  now that we broke up i can see what they were telling me.  it's really scary because when we were together i never saw any of it.  it also makes me really sad because we loved each other and i thought that we had a good honest relationship.  sorry i kinda went way off on a tangent there.  what i was trying to say is that if this is a best friend or parent don't hurt that relationship because the ones you've had for a long time are usually the ones who know best.  i'm not saying that you should ditch this person cuz i absolutely do not think that that is the answer either.  so  sorry if this makes no sense at all.  i'm a little tired and somehow every poem is reminding me of something in my life.  this was a really good poem. buh bye
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3 posted 2000-03-06 12:26 PM

The person in this was my best friend but we grew apart and now I don't see her...DONT HEAR ME COMPLAINING!! But she was saying all this stuff about a guy that I was with and when she found out that she was actually incorrect she couldn't handle it.

But apart from that thanks for the comments and tara, you make perfect sense  

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4 posted 2000-03-06 01:24 AM

i found this piece really deep......good work ~AF~  


Danny Holloway
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5 posted 2000-03-06 12:13 PM

Real emphatic with this message.  Isn't it interesting how free some people are with their opinions about other people, with little regard for your feelings.

Nice rhyme and structure.
Also, I want to say thanks for your nice response to Tamma's post about me.  That was very nice of you.
Best regards

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6 posted 2000-03-06 07:45 PM

No prob Danny
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7 posted 2000-03-06 07:56 PM

Nice piece....this was quite powerful. I liked the way it all came together.


 "Not all the answers lie within your realm or mine, they lie within the borders."

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