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since 2000-01-31
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0 posted 2000-03-03 09:08 AM

.Hi..b4 u guys read....(if u read i.e ))i want u all to know that this is not actually a poem....and is completely raw!I could not alter it ...otherwise it would have been worst!  

What's the difference between me and him ?
He shows his anger through burning and killing
Mine is burning inside me with me , rousing me to madness,
Hs wrath is in front of us ,with so many dead,
Mine is inside me, with me who's dying,
He hates for what the world has done to him,
I hate for what I have done to myself,
Love means nothing to him for it never existed in his world,
I don't love because I never got it , it did exist,
He's greedy because he never got what he wanted
I m greedy 'cause of what I want.
He's selfish because he's got nothing to care for.
I m selfish because I have no one who cares for me,
He's virtually dead , because he has got no one to live for.
I m dead because I was killed by my own fate!
He's a criminal in front of the world,
I m a criminal in my own eyes, in my own world,
He was never happy , he was born cursed,
I was happy once , but it soon died
He killed his loved ones for what they did to him
I killed mine , for what I could do to them
He has no one , he was born to hate.
I have no one 'cause hate was born with me
So we both stand on the same path ,
Hoping someday we'll meet and care!



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Paul Hoekman
since 1999-12-28
Posts 382
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1 posted 2000-03-03 10:18 AM

Heavy words
sad and a little disturbing
as well words that should not
be written by someone with the name
In Faith is Hope and Joy which
all adds up to LOVE.
It's sometimes a good exercise
to just lay down your words and feelings
sometimes it's much more important
to get them down in the way they come out
than to always make them rhyme.
Nice writing!

since 2000-01-31
Posts 228

2 posted 2000-03-03 03:45 PM

It may not nevessairly be a poem but I can relate to all of it.

 "The worst of what people do to one another is deceive.
Because when you love someone you control their version
of reality. If you lie to them that's like making them
autistic so that what they believe is reality is in fact,
not their true situation at all.

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