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Teen Poetry #2

An exit not worth having

anonymousfemale
Member Elite

since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

0 posted 2000-03-01 03:27 AM

How many times is enough,
Before you stop blinding me?
How long will all this last,
Before you let me be?

I can't see through my hurt,
I can't take much more pain,
It seems that living these days,
Is just an awful strain.

Emotions are not play things,
They belong to me not you.
I want to get away from your ways,
But I can never find my cue.

My tragedy is my own,
And I have to learn to cope.
The worst feeling is not pain,
But feeling like you've lost hope.

Danny Holloway
Member Elite

since 2000-01-15

Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK

1 posted 2000-03-01 11:10 AM

I think the last two lines are really good!
"The worst feeling is not pain
but feeling like you've lost hope"
This poem was well written!

poetry_kills
Senior Member

since 1999-12-04

Posts 549
new orleans

2 posted 2000-03-01 06:51 PM

anonymous: dittos to danny's comment on the last two lines... poetically brilliant... you sum up the idea behind the poem extrordinarily well here... keep up the good work

sincerely,
jerome the mysterious priest

And their bleating was like a wet salmon
slapped upon the land---slap! slap! slap!

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