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since 2000-02-21
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0 posted 2000-02-27 07:03 PM

I'm sorry if I broke your heart
I hope you know I care
We shared so many things together
Nothing else could compare

I hope you know I love you
Even though this is the end
I still need you in my life
You'll always be my friend

I'm really going to miss you
When you're not here each night
Without your hugs and kisses
I just won't feel right

I know that you don't want this
But I don't know what to say
I want you to be happy
Even if I'm not with you each day

Someday you'll find a new love
Who'll take the place of me
And I can guarantee you
I'll be jealous as can be

If we were meant to be together
Fate will make that be
This makes me feel so selfish
Like I'm only thinking about me

I hope that my decision
Isn't a big mistake
What if I regret this
It'll be too late

I hope that you don't hate me
I don't expect anything from you
You've given me so much
Taught me things I never knew

You were a wonderful boyfriend
And you are the sweetest guy
That makes it even harder
To tell you one last goodbye

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since 1999-11-08
Posts 678

1 posted 2000-02-27 10:12 PM

Its hard saying good bye....You have written this well.  Good job

 There are two kinds of pedestrians...the quick and the dead. Drive it like you stole it.

since 2000-01-31
Posts 228

2 posted 2000-02-28 03:38 PM

I am one of those selfish people whom it hurts to say goodbye to my first love. I am not yet to the point of wishing them complete happiness without me, as your poem expresses, but one day I hope to reach the point of your poem. I'm going to print up this poem and hang it by my computer so that every time I look at it I can be reminded as to how I hope to one day feel. Good work.

 "The worst of what people do to one another is deceive.
Because when you love someone you control their version
of reality. If you lie to them that's like making them
autistic so that what they believe is reality is in fact,
not their true situation at all.

since 2000-01-20
Posts 89
Bonduel, WI USA
3 posted 2000-02-28 03:46 PM

I think you have written a very good poem.  Yet I know how it feels to be the one on the other end reading and feeling the way the guy does in your poem.  I think you did a good job of expressing your feelings and emotions.  You're a really good poet.
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since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
4 posted 2000-02-28 11:04 PM

Hi this poem seems to tell the honest truth. Good Job...only one question if you seem to love atleast like this "wonderful" guy why did u go and break his heart? Im not critizing you im just curious. Good Luck finding someone who makes you happy. Just keep one thing in mind along the way a broken heart me i know. Ive been your oppiste place before! *Lisa*  
since 1999-12-02
Posts 148
Fredonia, NY USA
5 posted 2000-02-28 11:13 PM

   Everything happens for a reason.  And like you said, if you were meant to be together, something will bring you to that point again.  Good luck finding the one!  And I hope that you are able to keep your friendship with this other guy.  

since 2000-02-21
Posts 76
6 posted 2000-02-29 09:26 PM

Thanx for all the comments.  Just to fill you in about the poem a little more.  I was with this guy for a year and seven months and we had a lot of good times and some bad times to.  I almost felt like I was being suffocated being 16 years old and practically married to this guy.  We really loved each other but we had been fighting for almost a month and we couldn't resolve anything.  It was always me compromising what I thought and i realized that that's not what a good relationship is.  i'm sorry to all of you who have been on the recieving side of this, but remember that both people get hurt, not just the one who got dumped.  and thanx again for the nice comments.
Junior Member
since 2000-02-29
Posts 11

7 posted 2000-02-29 09:52 PM

Well I really liked your poem a lot. I am sixteen and my first love was with my boyfriend Ricky. We went out for a year and a half and we broke up last summer. We've been back together for three monthes this year and its wonderful because I've always loved him. But your poem really describes how hard it is to love someone you always argue with and are hurt by. It also shows how difficult it is to say goodbye to someone you love and care about. You did a really good job!
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