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appaz
New Member

since 2000-02-27

Posts 4

0 posted 2000-02-27 05:36 PM

I like butter from a box
Do you understand?
Not "I can't believe its not butter", or Butter Buds
just butter

I think you tried to leave me out
I know you knew too.
I always knew I could depend on you
To throw me away

Where do you come from?
Oh, you would come from there
Wouldn't you
Answer me!

Blow up a ballon,
Shoot the moon,
I don't have room
To watch it bloom

Astraea
Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 378
California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now

1 posted 2000-02-27 10:42 PM

Welcome to Passions! And welcome especially to the Teen Forum. I'm surprised no one has greeted you yet.

This was a bit vague for my mind.

BUT, I did like and understand the second and fourth stanzas. Perhaps if you explained what you meant by the first stanza, I would enjoy it far more. I think that's what threw me off in the first place.

Again, welcome, welcome, welcome!

~Astraea

"Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness."

"Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things."

angel6917
Member

since 2000-01-14

Posts 478
WI

2 posted 2000-02-28 10:43 AM

Yes, Welcome To Passions.
Your poem was good, but it confuzzled (confuzed) me a bit. I have to agree that the 2nd and 4th stanzas were good. Sorry- I get myself confuzzled easily enough, and you did a good job helping....

Just kidding! Smile

!
~Kristi Lynn

Bigjimmy
New Member

since 2000-02-28

Posts 2

3 posted 2000-02-28 08:02 PM

appaz,
This poem is really wacked out man, I can relate to it as well as Klown can relate to kid. I myself have been in some serious butter problems, and it takes a long time to get over. Rock On.

Bigjimmy
New Member

since 2000-02-28

Posts 2

4 posted 2000-02-28 08:08 PM

appaz,
This poem is really wacked out man, I can relate to it as well as Klown can relate to kid. I myself have been in some serious butter problems, and it takes a long time to get over. Rock On.

Singer1981
Member

since 1999-12-02

Posts 148
Fredonia, NY USA

5 posted 2000-02-28 11:11 PM

Appaz,
This was very confusing and a little random...but cute at the same time. It seemed like all four stanza's were on different topics. Maybe try and expand upon one? In any case...keep on writing!

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