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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina 
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I'm standing here, face to the wind Thinking she'll blow me aside In gusting spells she caresses my skin I feel such pain, I close my eyes I wish as she was blowing past She'd also blow away my mind This dismal day would be my last I'd simply leave it all behind But time will never stop its flow And I will have to make a choice There echoes a resounding NO That maybe she could kill my voice Choosing now to end the fight I'll never know my true vocation Because I'm lying here tonight In my grave of unmotivation "The bullets you bite from the pain you request, you're finding harder to digest" -Collective Soul |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Hi, this is a nice poem, though sad. Good use of rhyme and structure. You seem to have a good hand for poetry, so I hope to see more of your work. Good luck with that motivation! Danny |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
Thank you for your kind words. Actually, I'm not sure where I was going with this poem. It doesn't make much sense now that I re-read. Oh well, ya win some, ya lose some. "The bullets you bite from the pain you request, you're finding harder to digest" -Collective Soul |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
lyric: *heh* *scratches head* made sense to me... mabye i'm reading too much into it?... oh well, cest la vie... i like it, and that's what counts for me  sincerely, jerome the mysterious priest Disarm you with a smile And leave you like they left me here To wither in denial The bitterness of one who's left alone --[billy corgan]-- |
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