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peanogrl83 Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 202 |
Hello everybody - it's been awhile since I've posted anything. Oh well...here's some more stinky poetry from the world's most prolific writer of bad poetry! lol. I cannot speak, for I am hated, Silent am I, my destiny's slated. Shaking now, no words leave my lips, I take your beating from verbal whips. I cannot cry, for I am hated My sobbing leaves your cause inflated. Tears held back, I choke on smiles, A mask I wear that beguiles. I cannot think, for I am hated, Hungry thoughts must be sated. I alone am witness to my mind, Rambling thoughts, my sanity unwinds. I cannot hope, for I am hated, Despair runs rampant, unabated. I live in constant fear and pain, Laughter a sound I now disdain. I cannot love, for I am hated, A heart lays dormant, emaciated. Incapable of passion's long embrace, Cold stone now stands in its place. You will thrive, for I am hated, With my pain, you are elated. But don't forget how quickly I learn, Soon your hate, I shall return. |
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hoppy Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 271 |
this poem is most awsome. I love your use of vocabulary. I relate to the feels you express through this poem, "I live in constant fear and pain, Laughter a sound I now disdain." and the last stanza are my favorite parts. inspiring, if this is the work of a prolificly bad writter, i hope you get worse *L* good job "If there is anything the nonconformist hates worse than a conformist it's another nonconformist who doesn't conform to the prevailing standards of nonconformity." Don't look... you might see. Don't listen... you might hear. Don't think... you might learn. Don't walk... you might stumble. Don't run... you might fall. Don't make a decision... you might be wrong. Don't live...you might die. |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
WOW! This poem is incredible. We should all wish to be able to write so well. Except for one or two places, the poem flows wonderfully, and your vocabulary usage is far beyond what most of us are capable of. You are not a bad writer of poetry in any sense. I demand to see more poetry from you  |
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Star Fairy 2 Member
since 1999-09-06
Posts 260cerritos, california, usa |
that was a wonderful poem! keep up the good work... Regret for things you did maybe tempered by time, regret for things you Didn't do, however, is inconsolable... -------823------- |
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ShadyPoet New Member
since 2000-02-20
Posts 2 |
GREAT POEM!! I loved reading it!! I can honestly say that i was in AWE!! & great vocabulary usage!!  I bow down to your greatness! LOL I'm looking foward to be reading more of YOUR WORK!! By the way, i think its good that you dont let your hea get too big! LOL You should know that your a great & true poet, in my mind!! |
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ShadyPoet New Member
since 2000-02-20
Posts 2 |
GREAT POEM!! I loved reading it!! I can honestly say that i was in AWE!! & great vocabulary usage!! I bow down to your greatness! LOL I'm looking foward to be reading more of YOUR WORK!! By the way, i think its good that you dont let your head get too big! LOL You should know that your a great & true poet, in my mind!! |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
Wow! That was truely wonderful! You aren't a bad poet at all! You're great....really. That was amazing and the vocab...never knew so many words rhymed with hated. Great job! Hope you post some more. Salma "Not all the answers lie within your realm or mine, they lie within the borders." |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
Aside from your false claims that you write bad poetry, I must comment on how well you presented your theme. Unlike some poems I've read, your's was easy to understand, beautifully worded, and well thought-out. I think you are SPLENDERIFIC!!  "The bullets you bite from the pain you request, you're finding harder to digest" -Collective Soul |
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Singer1981 Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 148Fredonia, NY USA |
Vreni, Once again...you've surprised us all with something even better than the last time. I wish I could have your vocabulary. No wonder you always kick butt on the SAT's. I really liked this poem, but why do you feel like this? Email me hun cuz we haven't talked in forever. And keep on writing...Luv ya, Sarah |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
I have to agree with the comments above about your writing. This poem was very good! I enjoyed the rhyme and structure, as well as the depth with which you expressed your feelings. Very nice! (not stinky poetry by any means) Danny [This message has been edited by Danny Holloway (edited 02-21-2000).] |
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faith Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 89 |
Wow That was incerdible! i mean really very good!i wanna see more of yer poetry faith |
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peanogrl83 Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 202 |
Thanks for all your comments, guys! lol, hoppy - unfortunately, I seem to be getting worse and worse, in the most literal sense. Shadypoet - please don't bow unto my supposed greatness! I do not even claim to be a poet! :.) Thanks for your comments, Mistikman, Star Fairy 2, faith, Danny, LyricFetish, Sars (I know, we've gotta talk, hun!), and Salooma. |
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