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Still Loves... |
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Lil' Red New Member
since 2000-02-19
Posts 1 |
When you left and said I'm a need some love, I was puzzled. You told me to go be with him, which left me heartbroken. I was so miserable, I cried myself to sleep. Just realizing, he was there when I would weep. I cussed, cried, fussed, and fight, never stayed mad because I dreamed of you that night. Realized what you were doing for me, and understanding how much you loved me. A real man would understand the love that I need. A fake man would just let me heart bleed. Every now and then I'd tell you I love you. You Probably think I'm playing, but baby I do. I'm with him, but imagine you. If you was in a situation like this...what would you do? |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
You've expressed a lot of passion and desperation in this poem. I'm not sure I see where you're coming from, but I can feel your emotions through your words. Keep up the good work.  "The bullets you bite from the pain you request, you're finding harder to digest" -Collective Soul |
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rachella Junior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 39Indiana |
Welcome to Passions! I like how you put all your feelings down. That is really cool you aren't afraid to show who you are. Again, welcome to passions! |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Welcome to Passions.  You have expressed a lot of emotion in this piece. The form is very loose but if you wish to learn you have come to the right place. Feel free to e-mail if you would like some help. |
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