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since 2000-01-03
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0 posted 2000-02-19 08:57 AM

Educate my life
Manipulate me
Turn away and
Beat my being

You've pushed me
Down once before
Left me there in
The filth and mess

Waiting to see
How my life would
End, how i'd take
My last breath

But this stubborn
Sense of mine
Wouldn't let me
Give up so fast

I've found myself
Through the ways
And left you struggling
In my blurred tracks

But things change
So fast, i fell behind
And watched as you
Raced ahead

After the smoke cleared
I could barely see you
Not a single eye since
Has been left dry

Once, twice and yet
Another, I've been here
Before, and i refuse to
Learn from my mistakes

So take my hand
And burn it with
Love, place it next
To yours, charred

 "It's my heart that pounds beneath my flesh
it's my mouth that pushes out this breath..."-FTE

© Copyright 2000 Nights - All Rights Reserved
Danny Holloway
Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK
1 posted 2000-02-19 11:59 AM

Interesting poem. I found myself rereading it several times interpreting it as I could.
Whenever I do that with poetry, I realize someone has written something especially well.
That was a compliment!

Ophelia Speaks
Junior Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 11
suburbia, IL
2 posted 2000-02-19 03:02 PM

Very interesting- i especially liked the ending.  very emotional too.  thanks for sharing this!!!
Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781

3 posted 2000-02-19 04:41 PM

Nice poem.....i liked the way you put it and the ending was beautiful!  


Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528
North Carolina
4 posted 2000-02-19 05:50 PM

Great poem! I too re-read several times. I loved the whole thing, but the last stanza was where it all came together, so that was my favorite part. Pretty awsome.  

 "The bullets you bite from the pain you request, you're finding harder to digest" -Collective Soul

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since 1999-12-04
Posts 549
new orleans
5 posted 2000-02-28 11:27 PM

nights: the last stanza is absolutely riveting... i love it... especially the use of the word "charred"... it seems to suggest so much more depth in the last line than i saw in the entire rest of the poem... that may just be my reading though *heh*...

jerome the mysterious priest

 Disarm you with a smile
And leave you like they left me here
To wither in denial
The bitterness of one who's left alone
--[billy corgan]--

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