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Singer1981 Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 148Fredonia, NY USA 
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I sat there Watching, observing Such a serious expression Seeming without personality And then Something flashed across the screen The corners of his mouth began to curl up And a smile broke across his face Destroying all sereneness Leaving no trace of the pensive expression Then his mouth opened And out came a laugh Echoing in the once silent room It was in that moment Then I thought I knew him And I was drawn to him Then the smile dissapeared And he looked as if he was pondering the world's problems once more Only now, I am intrigued. [This message has been edited by Singer1981 (edited 02-19-2000).] |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
How about "once" instead of previously??? and I suggest "Expressions" as a title. Anyway, your style was good. Keep writing. Danny |
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Singer1981 Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 148Fredonia, NY USA |
Danny, Thanks for all of your suggestions!  I really appreciate it!~Sarah |
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