»
Archives
»
Teen Poetry #2
»
severed
| Teen Poetry #2 |
|
severed |
|
|
poetic_butterfly Junior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 25illinois, usa |
and so we cut the cord sever the dream disengage from the nighmare fall somewhere in between we lift our hands we are no longer bound in oblivion or tracing the crystal breathing idealistically we live purposely now separate from the leaden dreams that once lay burdened at the back door and left warm traces of breath on the icy window we sigh clearly now freely we dream it's unobtrusively obvious we've lsot nothing, now we'll live everything..... ....the words that stand still are often the ones that move us most.... |
||
| © Copyright 2000 poetic_butterfly - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
I feel this is well written. The imagery is good and the rhyme worked. Good writing! Danny |
||
|
Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
I really liked this....it was written nicly and the rhyme was interesting. Great job! Salma |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
