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The Death of My Life
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The Death of My Life |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
Anger slices through my mind Visions of hatred bang against my skull Mean thoughts race through my brain Evil is here It hangs like dead weight Weighing down my shoulders I'm on the brink of madness I can not win I try to contain it My hand is on a knife I can not put it down I want to end my life I try with all my might Not to do this deed The anger is to great It can not be beat The knife moves in a flash Repeatedly slicing through the anger My mind is controlled once more As I fall to the ground Tomorrow they will find me And everyone will know Exactly what kind of life My father gave me... Written last night..after an argument with my father ~~Lavada~~ "For every beauty, there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth, there is an ear somewhere to hear it For every love, there is a heart somewhere to receive it".--Ivan Panin |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
SC Girl, I don't have the best relationship with my father, and I have had thoughts of suicide before, but it isn't worth it! Even with all the things that are wrong with our lives, there are so many beautiful things. If you need to talk, e-mail me. "To the world you may be one person, but to one person you may be the world" |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
It really isn't worth it. Why end your life because of an argument. Keep your head up ad don't let anyone bring you down! Salma |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
Thsi is just me releasing my anger...I'm not a violent person, so I take it out on my poetry..I'm not thinking about suicide, I was just very angry!  Don't worry guys...I wonn't do anything drasticstay cool  ~~Lavada~~ "For every beauty, there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth, there is an ear somewhere to hear it For every love, there is a heart somewhere to receive it".--Ivan Panin |
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chic Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 245yellville, Ar, U.S. |
heck no killin the sister is the other sis's job LOL not anyway i understand how u feel sis i feel the same way 24-7 and have come close to the S word so chin up and smell the cookies To be or not to be...that is the question.[hamlet] |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
chocolate chip or macadamia nut?  [This message has been edited by sweetcollege_girl (edited 02-18-2000).] |
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chic Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 245yellville, Ar, U.S. |
what ever floats in ur cookie dough sis To be or not to be...that is the question.[hamlet] |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
ROTFLMAO!!!! Cool one sis Verry COOL HA HA!!! I guess I'll take....ALL OF THEM!!! CHOCOLATE HIGH!!! YEAH!! "For every beauty, there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth, there is an ear somewhere to hear it For every love, there is a heart somewhere to receive it".--Ivan Panin |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
scg: well, *heh* i hope you didn't show this poem to your father... it's a good poem, but i honestly dont think an arguement warrants this type of uncontrollable self-loathing and desire for self-destruction... honestly, when i was done reading (before i read the footnote) i thought this was the story of a young girl that had been abused harshly by her father (perhaps even molested)... anyway, psychological things aside... i think this is a good poem... i dont like your use of the word "mean" in the 3rd line though... i think you should replace it with "malicious"... "mean" just doesn't tell me anything at all... it's too common... sincerely, jerome the melancholy priest Disarm you with a smile And leave you like they left me here To wither in denial The bitterness of one who's left alone --[billy corgan]-- |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
well I'm glad to know this poem is not expressive of how you normally act. It was very good, you brought me into your head I think, and I've experienced such anger with relation to my mother sometimes. <sending you peacefulness>  "The bullets you bite from the pain you request, you're finding harder to digest" -Collective Soul |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Cool poem scg, my parents tend to draw such emotions from me a lot, although a tad less extreme I hope you can still have a good relationship with your dad after this. |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
If poetry is an outlet for your anger, then by all means, write, write, write. I think you will always find supportive people here, willing to share thoughts and encouragement. Best wishes, Danny |
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