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Teen Poetry #2

Never Satisfied

S3NSATION18
Junior Member

since 2000-01-26

Posts 31

0 posted 2000-02-12 12:04 PM

Just as things start to clear
They get shifted to high gear

I think I know but then I don't
my body wants to but my heart won't

I can't be happy with what I got
I won't be happy till i'm caught

Caught in between two guys
With nothing left but my lies

Taking for granted everything sweet and small
Wishing and wanting to have it all

I will get caught this i know
I must choose who will go

I've dug a hole almost too deep
I know now who i shall keep

The one who's clever,sweet,and smart
The one that's played a major part

The one i want to give my heart
I couldn't see Edward it was you form the start

S3NSATION18
Junior Member

since 2000-01-26

Posts 31

1 posted 2000-02-12 12:05 PM

In the last line it should be from*

Ender
Member

since 1999-12-08

Posts 200
Yuma, AZ USA

2 posted 2000-02-12 12:47 PM

This is a very well written poem. i am sorry to say i dont have a quote for you at the moment, but i will look. keep up the great work.
-Ender

*I am not one to be feared. I am one that should be loved forever. -Ender*

Jer
Member

since 1999-12-02

Posts 443
USA

3 posted 2000-02-12 10:43 PM

Hmmm... interesting. Is this written from a current standpoint? For some strange reason, the line

quote:
I've dug a hole almost too deep

reminded me of what Macbeth said in Shakespears Hamlet.
"All causes shall give way: I am in blood
Stepp'd in so far that, should I wade no more,
Returning were as tedious as go o'er:"
Anyway, Good job.

"WRITING IS EASY. ALL YOU DO IS STARE AT A BLANK SHEET OF PAPER UNTIL DROPS OF BLOOD FORM ON YOUR FOREHEAD." Gene Fowler

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