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cinderella still dwells |
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Raven Member
since 1999-06-14
Posts 67Hopewell Jct, New York, USA |
I never thought I'd find someone Who would watch Cinderella with me And read childrens books to me over the phone I never thought I'd find someone Who would not only accept my childish ways But love me for them And late at night I lie in my bed Curled up in my pink sheets And think about you The way you laugh The smell of your hair It makes me smile When you moved here to this boring town You were so beautiful Everyone loved you And I knew I didn't have a chance How I loved the way you acted Quiet, were you shy? Wearing punk rock shirts with names like Rancid and Nofx And that hat you always wore backwards Remember the time I stole it off your head? It's so hard to accept that you love me too Sometimes I wonder why You hold me close and stroke my hair And tell me you want to look into my eyes "I never have, and I want to see," you say. But I won't let you Eyes are windows to the soul, it's been said And my soul is too fragile and weak to be analyzed Any further And then you try to kiss me but I pull away And giggle and tease you You roll your eyes with an adoring smile Love ~*She's going to change the world. But she can't change me.*~ |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
Wow...I really liked this...it was really sweet and loving... It's nice to have someone like that, I bet. Salma |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
You are so romantic! I loved the way your words seemed to just flow like into a story that was poetic yet simplistic as well. you have such a natural gift. Keep it up!  |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
raven: this is a very good poem i dont believe i've ever read any of your work in the forum before (though i could be mistaken)... i have to admit that i like the second half of the poem better, but i do see how you tie both parts together  good job...sincerely, jerome the mysterious priest A savage place! as holy and enchanted As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted By woman wailing for her demon-lover! ~Coleridge |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Great work, Raven! And welcome back, it's been quite a while since I've seen you around here! Post more soon! *Krista Knutson* One lives in the hope of becoming a memory. ~*Antonio Porchia*~ |
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Jer Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 443USA |
This was great! For a few minutes I thought you were talking about me with the punk shirts and stuff. Anyway, great job. "WRITING IS EASY. ALL YOU DO IS STARE AT A BLANK SHEET OF PAPER UNTIL DROPS OF BLOOD FORM ON YOUR FOREHEAD." Gene Fowler |
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