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melmel02 New Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 4 |
Why I need you... Looking at you with another girl in your arms, makes my heart burn. The thought of her getting to touch you, makes knots in my heart. I know recently you have had these feelings too. I try my hardest to make you happy, to help you not think about things. But lately, it seems Im digging myself a hole. A hole I cant fill, it gets deeper and deeper, day by day. At the end of one days convorsation, we are friends again, not lovers, but almost. Then another day comes, you tell me something, and I cry again. You feel bad and appologize, “im sorry, dont cry” they all sound so familar. They comfort me for the moment, then that night when Im laying in bed, the memories of everything I have done to you, they come back. I lay in the darkness of my room, alone, no one to comfort me, or to ask whats wrong. I lay there and cry myself to sleep, night after night. All I want when im laying there, is someone to touch my cheek, and tell me it will all be ok, but I know there is no one there for me. No one can see or share theses feelings I have, no one understnads. Thats why i need you. Your the only one who can understand. |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
melmel: first, welcome to passions  second, this is a very moving and heart-felt poem... i've often struggled with similar things (though, luckily it has only been in my mind)... i assure you that you will find countless people in this forum that will be willing to cry with you, dream with you, and rejoice with you... this is a place for comfort and for joy... so welcome  i look forward to your next contribution of poem..sincerely, jerome the mysterious priest A savage place! as holy and enchanted As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted By woman wailing for her demon-lover! ~Coleridge |
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Jer Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 443USA |
Ahh yes this was great. I know the pain that you speak of. Great job and Welcome to Passions! "WRITING IS EASY. ALL YOU DO IS STARE AT A BLANK SHEET OF PAPER UNTIL DROPS OF BLOOD FORM ON YOUR FOREHEAD." Gene Fowler |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
So what, are you clairvoyant, or have you been reading my mind? This is the exact way that I feel about a certain person in my life. I know it can be frustrating, but just know that, if nothing else, you will be able to overcome almost anything through writing poetry and talking to people who will understand your pain and not judge you. Your poem was great by the way. |
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Ender Member
since 1999-12-08
Posts 200Yuma, AZ USA |
If a girl was to give me this poem, i would probably start crying right then. This is a very touching poem and really is put well. You do a beautiful job at poems. keep them up---i cant wait for more. -Ender |
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melmel02 New Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 4 |
Hey thanks everyone! I didnt think many people would understand it. Im glad you can! *~Mel~* |
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Crystalina123 Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 228 |
You completely read my mind, I'm experiencing the same thing! Thanks for convincing me that I"m not crazy to have these feelings! "The worst of what people do to one another is deceive. Because when you love someone you control their version of reality. If you lie to them that's like making them autistic so that what they believe is reality is in fact, not their true situation at all. |
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faith Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 89 |
Hey welcome to passions! i m new here too! Hope we see more of each other ! faith |
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~Venus~ Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 128 |
Wow...I'm glad I came to Teen Passions today...I see we have some budding poets here! (warm smile) Hope you have fun, and I'll have to check back here for more of your work! ~goddess of love, passion, and desire~ *She loves, she's Love, and yet she is not lov'd* |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
I gotta tell you...you've read my mind as well. Wow! I've felt like that about a person in my life and I do really feel your pain. Welcome to passions! Salma |
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Isabelle Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 176Indiana |
Great poem. I'm like everyone else you like read my mind or something. One thing i've learned is don't ever think your alone in how you are feeling as you can see many people have felt the same way. Anyhow, I can't wait to read another one of your poems. Isa |
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SweetScorpio New Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 2 |
I dont want to sound like everyone else but i must say you've compleatly read my mind. Thanx for writing such a great poem, im thinking of sending it to the person it describes and then maybe he'll understand how i feel. |
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Gadget28 Junior Member
since 2000-02-21
Posts 33Miami, Florida United States |
Excellent! I sent this to my ex and he broke up with his "girl" and we got back together, thank you! |
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sunshine17 Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 89Bonduel, WI USA |
That's a really good poem. I totally feel the same way for my now ex. |
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Sara Junior Member
since 2000-02-24
Posts 27LaCrosse WI, United States |
I believe that what you wrote is a common experience, but you put it into words in a way I would never be able to. Maybe showing my friends this will help them to see the why I acted the way I did with my ex. This poem is very moving. |
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trevorskogsbergh Member
since 2000-02-03
Posts 129South Pasadena, CA |
Great poem! My ex and I were the same way for along time. I know it's hard but the longer you torture yourself over some guy, the worse your gonna feel. Even if he was your first love or not. You have to fight the feeling and try to move on. But, if there is a still a chance and you know for sure that he still feels the same way about you, then by all means go for it. This may not be the best advice you've ever gotten but it's gotten me here. Just go with what you feel. It's all in the heart. Trevor P.S. Welcome to Passions!<!signature--> <font face="Arial, Verdana" size="1" color="#000080"> If you want to walk with God, you've got to go His way!</font> [This message has been edited by trevorskogsbergh (edited 02-24-2000).] |
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faith Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 89 |
Hi welcome to passions nice poem too faith |
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Tara Member
since 2000-02-21
Posts 76Minnesota |
I hate to sound repetative but I absolutely loved your poem. And like a lot of other people I'm feeling that exact way right now. thanx for such a good poem. |
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