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Make A Wish
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Make A Wish |
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Nights Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 56 |
Make a wish You never know If it'll come true You're at love's Edge, at the cliff What will you do? Hanging on with A grasp so strong Draped in the air Trying to break free From what holds you To let go, would you dare? A gust passes by Whispering in your ear "You're mistaken, a fool..." It torments your spirit It's you and yourself Battling in a duel You're on your eight Life, just one more left What will happen to you? Take your chances Make a wish It might just come true... "It's my heart that pounds beneath my flesh it's my mouth that pushes out this breath..."-FTE |
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angel6917 Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 478WI |
I like this poem a LOT better than the other one I replied to, and this one, in my opinion, has a lot more feeling behind it. I know the feelings in this one, and can relate. I sent one to my ex-boyfriend, and maybe he'll understand some things now, too...  ~Kristi Lynn "Why does no one sees how hard I cry?" -Me |
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Nights Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 56 |
Thanks for the response, and thanks for being honest about my other poem. The words just appeared in my mind and i wrote them on a chalk board in school, and then on paper. "It's my heart that pounds beneath my flesh it's my mouth that pushes out this breath..."-FTE |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Hey, I really enjoyed this poem. I could relate to it! Keep up the good work! "To the world you may be one person, but to one person you may be the world" |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
Sometimes when I'm in a situation where I have to make a difficult choice, I feel just like you feel in this poem. It's all chaos and confusion, but also a glimmer of hope. You poem was wonderful. |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
nights: extremely intriguing... this one left me wanting more... mabye a response poem is forthcoming? *hoping*... very good work sincerely, jerome the mysterious priest A savage place! as holy and enchanted As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted By woman wailing for her demon-lover! ~Coleridge |
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Jer Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 443USA |
Boy do I have some wishes! Ohh... yess, sorry you have me thinking. Good job. "WRITING IS EASY. ALL YOU DO IS STARE AT A BLANK SHEET OF PAPER UNTIL DROPS OF BLOOD FORM ON YOUR FOREHEAD." Gene Fowler |
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Ender Member
since 1999-12-08
Posts 200Yuma, AZ USA |
This is a wonderful poem. you wrote this very well, and i would like to congratulate you on it. i say, make a wish to keep writing as well as you are now and make sure it comes true. -Ender |
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