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rich-pa
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since 2000-02-07
Posts 317
New Orleans, Louisiana

0 posted 2000-02-10 01:34 PM


(i decided on a title)

I've seen the things that live in the night
lurking about in abysmal Shadows
crimson eyes, that radiate ravenous delight
with each deadly, stealthy step
-shying away from the sanctified Light
waiting for some prey,
-an innocent-
to fall into their depraved clutches
dragging it to those icy Shadows
devouring body, spirit, and soul,
wallowing in the lust and glory
of the blood and the screams and the cries
-an orgy of guiltless pleasure-
and when there's nothing left to condenm
they move on,
-only leaving fuel for the eternal Fire-
taking their unquenchable hunger,
still lurking in those deslolate Shadows.


[This message has been edited by rich-pa (edited 02-10-2000).]

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Nights
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since 2000-01-03
Posts 56

1 posted 2000-02-10 06:36 PM


I didn't want this to die out without any response.  Your use of descriptive words is great.  How about "Silent Predator" for a title?

 "It's my heart that pounds beneath my flesh
it's my mouth that pushes out this breath..."-FTE

poetry_kills
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since 1999-12-04
Posts 549
new orleans
2 posted 2000-02-10 08:24 PM


rich-pa: kinda creepy, but still a solid poem... i dig it..    keep up the good work man...

sincerely,
jerome the mysterious priest

 A savage place! as holy and enchanted
As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted
By woman wailing for her demon-lover!
~Coleridge



rich-pa
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since 2000-02-07
Posts 317
New Orleans, Louisiana
3 posted 2000-02-10 11:49 PM


changed it up a bit, whadda ya think now jerome?
Ender
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since 1999-12-08
Posts 200
Yuma, AZ USA
4 posted 2000-02-11 08:33 PM


As i have said bewfore, i love poems that involve angels.  i especially like this one. keep up the good work.
-Ender

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